Okay

Okay

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Attempt at writing lyrics

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The mere thought of you
Bein' happy 
Yet so far away from me 
You are happy 
Without me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
Watching the wind caress your hair 
You infront of me 
Yet so far away from me 
You found someone else 
Better than me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not 
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
Maybe you're just 
Enclosed in a shell 
And you don't wanna share 
What you actually feel 
With me 
I can see that 

And I'm okay with it 
I'm okay with it 
Maybe I'm not 
But I will be 
Sometime soon 
Okay with it 
 
I'm breaking down 
slowly
slowly 
Coz 
I'm never gonna be
okay with it..



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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This is really well done. Catchy lyrics, I would certainly listen to this if it was a song!
The words are very easy to relate to and portray that emotion really well. Pretending to be okay, wearing a mask, when it really isn't okay...
Great work!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your words here, Nerissa! Glad you like it (:
Sinbulvinter

3 Months Ago

I love good lyricists, especially seeing how in mainstream american music - there really aren't many.. read more



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Wow!
It's amazing. Loved the way you portrayed those emotions. It's really admirable!
I really like your work!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much, really appreciate you reading my older works too. Glad you like this one 😊
NerdyBeauty

2 Months Ago

You're inborn writer! Best of Luck :)
This is really well done. Catchy lyrics, I would certainly listen to this if it was a song!
The words are very easy to relate to and portray that emotion really well. Pretending to be okay, wearing a mask, when it really isn't okay...
Great work!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your words here, Nerissa! Glad you like it (:
Sinbulvinter

3 Months Ago

I love good lyricists, especially seeing how in mainstream american music - there really aren't many.. read more
Attempting to write lyrics? for a singer? is the singer you? perhaps I should listen

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Not for a singer..just me experimenting.. Maybe you should 😉😊
Wow amazing work.
It is obvious that somethings never change.
Whether we admit it or not.

We may think we are okay with certain things happening around us but still we are not.

Its like a war between mind and heart. The mind feels Okay but not the heart.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I agree, it's hard indeed to make ourselves believe that but deep down we know that's never gonna ha.. read more
Manasa.L

9 Months Ago

You are always welcome dear:)
This is my favorite. I relate to this poem so much.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! It means a lot to me :)
I can imagine whispering this to myself, try to be strong, but in the end bursting to tears and hide myself while reading this ethereal poem. It is an outburst from the bottom of the heart, that you are trying to love so hard, but in the end it comes in vain. The ending is my favorite part of the whole poem. I hope that you will find something that would help you get over this, so that even you are not okay with it, this sadness can be forgotten at least.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey thank you so much for the kind words! I hope so too..
The way you have written this out is really great, makes it sound really poetic and looks pretty cool.

This poem is filled with emotion, and depth.

Its like the subject of this poem is thinking out loud, i liked that.

I like the ending and the acceptance, that although she keeps telling herself shes ok, she is clearly not.

Great write :) Keep writing :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Cimmy! That acceptance drains you in the process.. I'm glad you liked it ☺
cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Months Ago

Your very much welcome :)
I can see this being played out with a soft melody, reads like like a song. Nicely written & very sad. I like it :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kesha

9 Months Ago

I know same here! Wish my talent went beyond just writing elegant words...
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hahah we gotta keep at what we're good at 😉
Kesha

9 Months Ago

Haha yeah that we do!
Hey, you can write lyrics also? Aw, that's great yumna, I really liked it..:)
Write some more

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Hey thank you, Ashish! I will sure write once I'm back 😛
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Definitely has lyrical bones...the refrain is there.
I would suggest some tweaking with some of the phrasing though, my sentiments are on point with TJ.

It has easy flow though, it wouldn't take too much to make it a tight composition.

With regard to the subject matter it is very felt my friend! Really solid attempt. Starz x

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Hey thank you, Starzy! I'll definitely work on this one soon :)
I'm glad you like it :)

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