If Only

If Only

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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If only I could see
the light shining in your eyes.

If only you could know
you're the one who gives me strength.

If only I could be
the reason for all your smiles.

If only I could tell
I love you more than anyone else...


but life,
life ain't ever fair...
it takes away too soon
all you care about.


And now,
now I'm forced to think of you;
nothing more than a memory
tearing me apart,
as I close my eyes...

If only I could see
the light shining in your eyes.

If only you could know
you're the one who gives me strength.

If only I could be
the reason for all your smiles.

If only I could tell
I love you more than anyone else...



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So poignant and true ... I could relate to almost every word. I love the repetition and simplicity of this piece and how they convey the speaker's grief and longing. I also enjoyed the word flow in this piece ... every syllable seemed to dance from the page ... I rarely see it when free verse does that. Overall, a very strong poem.

- William Liston

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, William! I'm glad you liked it but sad that you could relate as per the subject.... read more



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There's desperation in this write to get that message to the one intended if only for peace of mind so one can let go!

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Probably that was the case. Thank you for the interesting interpretation here, Andrew :))
Oh but there are so many things that can be seen

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

But not those which we really want to see....
So poignant and true ... I could relate to almost every word. I love the repetition and simplicity of this piece and how they convey the speaker's grief and longing. I also enjoyed the word flow in this piece ... every syllable seemed to dance from the page ... I rarely see it when free verse does that. Overall, a very strong poem.

- William Liston

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, William! I'm glad you liked it but sad that you could relate as per the subject.... read more
If is such a small and insignificant word, yet it is used so much to convey much of us, that it should at the very least be all capital letters, to show how important a word it is. When they become a memory in your life, that you aren't ready to let go of, all we are left with is if.
A sadness we can all relate to, beautify penned.

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Lorry.

9 Months Ago

beautifully penned I meant :)
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Nemo! Always appreciate your thoughts on my pieces! I'm glad you liked it ☺
Lorry.

9 Months Ago

I appreciate your appreciation :)
Very nice writing.
I can relate ., Thank you for sharing

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you for liking! Appreciate it ☺
Uday Bhasuthker

9 Months Ago

Most welcome
Wow this is amazing, how it hurts to be in love with someone and completely unable to tell them how you feel. I loved this write. You MUST learn an instrument so you can sing your lyrics along with something ;) I'd totally give you a listen!

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Kesha

9 Months Ago

Oh im sure your voice is lovely :)
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hahah you made me blush :p
That's sweet of you to say :) Thank you :)
Kesha

9 Months Ago

You are very welcome :)
I like "if only", it's not like a "what if", because it shows that your ready and willing, just not able. This poem shows hope, which i admire. Plus, you wrote/explained yourself very well. Tyfs.

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

That's quite a difference you've pointed out! Thank you for your thoughts here, Cyprian! I'm glad yo.. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

You're most welcome. :)
This reminded me something..
Good work yumna ..

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hi, Nora! Thank you! Good to know it resonated with you ☺
Lots of true words in this that we all seem to experience at times. Nice work!

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Hey, thank you so much for your kind words here! Truly appreciate it ☺
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9 Months Ago

You are so welcome!!! :) xoxo
I appreciate the contrast here; the strong transition of "if only" to "never fair" and "I'm forced" back to "if only". It makes the questioning almost seem futile.

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Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts here! Truly appreciate it ☺

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