If Only

If Only

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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If only I could see
the light shining in your eyes.

If only you could know
you're the one who gives me strength.

If only I could be
the reason for all your smiles.

If only I could tell
I love you more than anyone else...


but life,
life ain't ever fair...
it takes away too soon
all you care about.


And now,
now I'm forced to think of you;
nothing more than a memory
tearing me apart,
as I close my eyes...

If only I could see
the light shining in your eyes.

If only you could know
you're the one who gives me strength.

If only I could be
the reason for all your smiles.

If only I could tell
I love you more than anyone else...



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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So poignant and true ... I could relate to almost every word. I love the repetition and simplicity of this piece and how they convey the speaker's grief and longing. I also enjoyed the word flow in this piece ... every syllable seemed to dance from the page ... I rarely see it when free verse does that. Overall, a very strong poem.

- William Liston

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, William! I'm glad you liked it but sad that you could relate as per the subject.... read more



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I appreciate the contrast here; the strong transition of "if only" to "never fair" and "I'm forced" back to "if only". It makes the questioning almost seem futile.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your thoughts here! Truly appreciate it ☺
Lovely poem, Yumna! I can picture Coldplay singing this :)
"If only I could be
The reason for all your smiles
If only I could tell
I love you more than anyone else" Beautiful!

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Giullia King

1 Year Ago

No, no just kind :)
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yeah right! Thank you for your kindness here 😂
Giullia King

1 Year Ago

Haha, you're welcome!
Having experienced intense grief myself I can tell you that the emotion in your poem is spot on. In spite of its intense sadness, "If only" is healing in that it brings to the surface those emotions we tend to feel privately, after everyone has gone home. Your poem has a wonderful flow to it , being wistful in the first stanza, followed by the sucker punching line "But life,
Life is never fair
It takes away all too soon
What you care about " and its equally emotional follow up "And now,
Now I'm forced to think of you
As nothing more than a memory
Tearing me apart as I close my eyes" concluding again in wistfulness. Your use of repetition and flow paints a vivid picture of the grieving process in action, which many of us can relate to. Beautiful work! added to my favorites.


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I've been trying to write lyrics on and off and this one here is one. It's actually got a music to i.. read more
Mary

1 Year Ago

post your recording if you can
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm thinking about that yes ☺

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