Symbol

Symbol

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

She was -

a symbol ~ of courage,
a symbol ~ of wisdom,
a symbol ~ of strength,
a symbol ~ of calm,
a symbol ~ of hope,

that emanated
through her very essence --
felt by those around her.


But only she knew ...

what it takes,
to put on ~ a brave face
and mask
her intense thoughts
within.

a mask ~ of courage,
a mask ~ of wisdom,
a mask ~ of strength,
a mask ~ of calm,
a mask ~ of hope,

to cover the signs
of her scarred soul
~ and mind.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Oh YumnaKay, this is a very heart wretching piece that I can so closely relate to.

I enjoyed reading this piece as a whole but my favorite lines were the repetition of the "Symbols & the Masks" ~ a very nice piece, in wording & presentation YumnaKay.

Wishing you a good day. 🌹

Blessings,
~ hsg

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating and your lovely words. Blessings to you as well 😊
heavenscentgirl1

4 Months Ago

You are very welcome ...



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Oh YumnaKay, this is a very heart wretching piece that I can so closely relate to.

I enjoyed reading this piece as a whole but my favorite lines were the repetition of the "Symbols & the Masks" ~ a very nice piece, in wording & presentation YumnaKay.

Wishing you a good day. 🌹

Blessings,
~ hsg

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating and your lovely words. Blessings to you as well 😊
heavenscentgirl1

4 Months Ago

You are very welcome ...
Excellent repetition to express how she is perceived, and the masks she wears to the world. Many times, we "fake it till we make it". I am impressed by this as I am all of your work. Well done seems inadequate.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

And every time you review one of my pieces, I'm reminded of how inadequate I am in understanding you.. read more
Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

Never let 'em see you cry? I'm a faithful disciple of that particular doctrine...
Simple? N.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Aye, I believe in that too ...
This seems like you have been searching the philosophy in you

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Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Must have been that..
I really love this poem, Yumna! I don't have anything negative to say about this one :)

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Have you ever said anything negative about my work? I don't think so 😉
Thank you so much,.. read more
Giullia King

9 Months Ago

I guess I haven't 😊 You're a good writer! 💕
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I'm getting better 😉
You're superb yourself, G 😊 💜
I really loved the format and flow of this piece! It's quite sad that most of us have to hide how we truly feel about particular things. Nicely written my friend :)

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Yes, it is..
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)
Kesha

9 Months Ago

You are welcome :D
Yep! That's usually how it goes. Good words :) I.I.

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Isabella Ivy

9 Months Ago

Blessings to you dearest!
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Blessings to you too! 😊
Isabella Ivy

9 Months Ago

I'll take 'em! Thanks :)
It is sad we use mask and fake face to live in our world. I like the honest flow of thoughts leading to true ending. Sometime we forget who we were and can go back. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Yes, sadly that is the case. Thank you for sharing your thoughts here 😊
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Poet.
such inspiring poem. Just lifted my spirit. Thanks

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊
Simple, yet defined by its incessant drilling away of the facade... Only truly refined discipline can shine through when emotions leave us scarred... Mightily penned....

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Rightly said!
Thank you. I appreciate your words here 😊
This poem's message is very intriguing to me in that it expresses what we (as humans) rarely notice: that the most beautiful people can still feel pain. Outward appearances can tell the biggest lies at times ... a nice smile doesn't necessarily signify happiness; in fact, some of the most depressed people I've known were the ones who smiled a lot, but they were still, nevertheless, symbols of courage and hope, just like the character in this poem. I love the layers in this poem in that they convey both the woman's beauty to others as well as her concealed internal struggle. The almost parallel structure between the two stanzas portrayed this nicely.

For critiques, I noticed some grammatical mistakes:

1. "that emanated,"
That comma is unnecessary.

2. "what it takes"
"Takes" should be "took."

3. "to put on a brave face"
If you replaced the phrase "put on" with "wear," this line would read smoother in my opinion.

4. "and to mask"
The word "to" is redundant.

- William Liston

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you, William for the appreciation as well as for pointing out the errors. Except for two, I ac.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

*don't think

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