Realization

Realization

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Composed in Free Verse..

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Realization

Not a moment too soon
or a moment too late,
as if the night spoke
whispering softly,
and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,
how the last shred of hope 
I was hanging by
was merely
a glimmer, a spark, 
keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing
Luna would cast her spell,
and you'll fall back
into the cocoon of my arms;
that stars
would sprinkle their dust,
lighting a pathway to
relive our moments.

This,
and, maybe, it's a fact
you're not as gone
as I think;
that you'll appear
within the span of
a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,
hoping it was not to be
that I'd find an eternal distance
between us,
that even if I want you
a gap would remain
uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,
thin as where
air and water meet,
here, where I am ...
choking back tears 
in this moment's realization
that you've finally gone,
not even looking back,
never to return....!




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

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Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
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Aloha Yumna, you write with such emotion :) very heartfelt. There is pain in coming to realize such things and humility in acceptance. The words are so soft like whispers woven like lace. Really lovely work Yumna. Izzy

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

There is indeed. I think that realization gives us strength in the long run..
Thank you, Izzy.. read more
Island Hippy

7 Months Ago

You're welcome
its great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you :))
And there is another beautiful poem. Im happy to have read this. It is something when one you care for leaves, but there are so many roads open for others. You never know what you go into

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

True, I agree.
Thank you for liking and sharing your insight here, Sir Drift. Means a lot .. read more
Beautiful pie e of poetry, I loved it and well penned.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Farhan. Glad you liked it :)
Farhan Shaikh

8 Months Ago

Your welcome😊
Oh gosh, this is quite up my alley of interest... You have free verse down pat, my friend... Luna and firefly can kiss me goodnight as I close the page on this beautiful poetry... Very well penned...

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Silente! I'm glad this kept your interest! Means a lot to me 😊
Silente

8 Months Ago

Of course.
Wow ... a beautiful piece of poetry with an enthralling visual presentation to match. My favorite aspect of this poem had to be its delicacy in that every word feels soft yet poignant. The imagery feels light and feathery, which (to me) provides a good contrast with the poem's melancholic theme. Also, I can't tell you how much I love the lines "thin as where air and water meet" ... they're so soft and simple yet amazingly beautiful, almost like a soft rain or a cool breeze.

As for critiques, I have a quibble with the third line of the third stanza: "and you'll fall back." In my mind, it makes more sense for "you'll" to be "you'd" because the rest of the poem is in past tense ~ that, and the speaker seems not to hold that belief anymore.

- William Liston

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you for this amazing review, William. I'm glad you liked the imagery in this one.
As f.. read more
Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
T.. read more
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You evoke emotion so well Yumna. Graceful and blunt. Always a pleasure.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Bev! I'm glad the emotions hit you here 😉😊
Very well written. And described so eloquently. Thanks for sharing this poem!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Paul! I'm glad you liked it 😊
This is a good free verse. You could do more beautiful poems I believe so. Keep writing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you! I've been experimenting on what I can do better so I'll definitely be working on that. I .. read more
CAPOLAVORO

9 Months Ago

You are very much welcome.

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