In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned

In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned

A Chapter by Dr YumnaKay
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Composed in Villanelle form

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In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned...

'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,
like tingling waves caressing 'gainst my shore.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

So lost before, I wanted to be found;
to feel his touch within my very core;
'pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.

Whispers in the wind, swept me off the ground;
and when I looked down, no fear anymore;
in his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

Towards his melody; then I was bound.
Higher and higher I let my heart soar.
'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,

Oh, what sweet dreams, just to have him around!
To fulfill those delights of moments before.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

With his soft music, my heart he'll surround,
as there's no one more than him I adore!
'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!



© 2017 Dr YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr YumnaKay
~~ Another one of my learning experiences with Richard ~~ 😊

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Wow....is it permitted for me to cry? For this doth truly make me weep! It's gorgeous, Yumna. It's happy, emotional and so true. We've all felt these feeling at some point. Anyone who reads this and doesn't feel their heart heat is surely bereft of a soul.
I loved it! (I'm also a little jealous of your skill with words) ;) :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Well, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so muc.. read more



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This is beautiful, well done Yumna.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Shaun! I'm glad you liked it 😊
You done a very good job, the poem is so sweet.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Abel! I'm glad you found it sweet 😊
It is amazing that feeling one gets
in the presence of a lover
The room is drowning in his love
and so are you
He is the sea

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for this sweet poetic response, SoloSolace! I appreciate it :)
I love the semi-archaic wording in this poem. :)

A deep and meaningful Love poem that is both tender and sweet, a devotion to a soul mate. A beautiful poem concerning true love and the benefits found therein.

The last line of every stanza is repeated in a wonderful fashion and is an effective method of emotional delivery. ;)

Yet another great Love poem that doesn't resort to cheesy cliches. Superb poem, Yumna! :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Ahhh well I'll have to take lessons from you to write dark poetry as it's mainly your area of expert.. read more
Lovecraft

11 Months Ago

You don't have to write gory. Just start by writing in a concept that is somewhat dark and make it p.. read more
Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Umm okay.. Will try 😉😊
Clapping* Breathtaking and tantalizing read! Encore! Isabella :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Isabella Ivy

11 Months Ago

From my side of the page, your talent shines!
Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

That's sweet of you to say 😊😊
Isabella Ivy

11 Months Ago

Very true! Keep up the good work!
The best part, I loved about this poem is that I did not have to go back to read again. Its like a soft hum with a balance meaning being conveyed. Repetitions made it song like. Enjoyed. :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Queen! I enjoyed writing in this form too! I'm glad you liked it 😊😊
Beautiful and hypnotizing. Reminded me a bit of Poe and his repetition of nevermore in the Raven. Like a drum beat steady and continuous.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! That's a huge comparison! I'm glad you liked it 😊
This is beautiful! I have nothing to say except it's perfect and one of my favorites :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Woah thank you, Gullia! I'm glad you liked it 😊💜
I like the idea but the 'pon start to many lines is so kitsch.. and 'merry sound'?!

'Tis quaint, egad. Thou hast been playing with thy quill lol

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Haha that sound is supposed to be merry 😉
I appreciate your words. Thank you, Jibey 😇
I loved this. What a sweet and romantic poem. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Najam! I'm glad you liked it! 😊😊
Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

You're welcome ☺

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