Last Breath of Goodbye

Last Breath of Goodbye

A Chapter by Dr YumnaKay
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Last Breath of Goodbye

What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds
smothering every semblance
of inner light,
has now returned...

That hellhole of your love 
you cast me into,
every inch of my skin crawled,
left the carmine softness
of my heart charred,
my soul burned!

Our last breath of goodbye
lingers in the air …
waiting,
wishing,
wanting,
for me to accept
not having you by my side.

That flame I kept alive;
those embers,
like hot desert winds ~ dried,
sparking back to life...
leave me no choice, 
except to cast them
...all aside!

Thank you J Todd Underhill for giving this piece a voice

 https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-underhill-05-01-2017





© 2017 Dr YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr YumnaKay
Yet another learning experience of writing poetry with Richard :)

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Breathtaking experience... wow... omg...! This was amazing!

"What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds"
Very descriptive and flows well!
Keep it up! :)
Your learning experience with Richard are working very well :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Well, as of now, they're on hold lol
Thank you for liking this one too. I appreciate your wo.. read more
Mr.Writer

10 Months Ago

Lol no problem :D



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Charismatic poem.... sends the reader into a parallel universe... amazing choice of words.... great emotion...

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you. I'm glad you like it :)
Aloha, You write beautifully, and this reads smoothly with a lingering bittersweet after taste. The image is also lovely. Izzy

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating. Glad you like it 😊
Breathtaking experience... wow... omg...! This was amazing!

"What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds"
Very descriptive and flows well!
Keep it up! :)
Your learning experience with Richard are working very well :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Well, as of now, they're on hold lol
Thank you for liking this one too. I appreciate your wo.. read more
Mr.Writer

10 Months Ago

Lol no problem :D
Why can't I write as beautifully and emotively and engaging as this?!
It's incredibly powerful and beautiful :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

That's what I think when I read your stories, Tina! We're still even 😛😉
Thank you for .. read more
Tina H.W.

10 Months Ago

Yeh...but stories ate just stories - fiction. There has to be so much more emotion and feeling when .. read more
Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

And if I said when I write poetry, I write without actual feelings then? 'Cause that's how I write s.. read more
How did I ever miss this one?!?!....Such talent....And such an emotional​ly beautiful piece of writing,...Dripping with sadness and longing.,,,,such a fan of yours pretty lady...You never siese to amaze me, thank you for being you

Poeticme

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

You are too kind. Thank you for liking! Humbled by your comments 😊
"That hellhole of your love
you cast me into,
every inch of my skin crawled,
left the carmine softness
of my heart charred,
my soul burned!"

This can be taken in many different ways. I see the suffering, the love, the pain, the hopes. Beautiful!


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation. I'm glad you like it 😊
I love the first verse so much!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Gullia! I appreciate your words 😊
Your writing is very clear and smooth. You work with each word like with emotions. This is great poem

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation. I'm glad you liked it 😊
Martin

11 Months Ago

Yes I like it very much.
I love this one. full of emotions indeed.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad the emotions touched you 😊
I liked this one dear Poet. Powerful and haunting words make the reader feel the emotion and the disappointment. I like the realistic ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Coyote! Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

I love your work and you are welcome.

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