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Empty Hands

Empty Hands

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Empty Hands


Empty hands...

where once I held

those dreams of us.


Those dreams,

dreamt in twilight,

between waking

and falling asleep...


that feeling of being whole,

fulfilled;

yet, so empty...

like you can't get enough

of what you crave

the most.


I yearned to ease your pain;

your sufferings

added to my burdens.


That fear of losing you,

kept me from

breathing freely...


and, you didn't let me,

even though

I asked to soothe

your aching heart,

you pushed me right out...


as I watched those dreams

fall off my hands,

disappearing

into a never-ending mist

of oblivion. 


I'm left, now...

staring at my empty hands,

which once held 

those dreams of us

...together.




© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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That fear of losing you, kept me from breathing freely...
You didn't let me. Even though I asked to let me soothe your aching heart. You pushed me right out, as I watched those dreams fall off my hands... disappearing into a never ending mist of oblivion


Mmmm this speaks to my soul yumna....feel like you wrote it only for me .... :)
I love how deeply you get into the subject... and love reading your work...keep sharing your wonderful work ..

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Ria! Your words mean a lot to me 😊😊



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"you pushed me right out", those words speak to me of someone not prepared to fully commit. So much warmth and love on offer and yet your words left a sense of rejection. Empty hands indeed Dr Y. Well conveyed emotions here.

Chris

Posted 12 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Hours Ago

It certainly was that at that time...
Thank you so much for your words here, Christine. Alway.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

11 Hours Ago

Always a pleasure to read you.
Over here, there is a saying "Cold hands...warm heart." I suppose after reading this we could change that to "empty hands...empty heart."
Well done, Doc...it reminded me of a time...I could have been more thoughtful.
A good write.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

13 Hours Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, Ted. Glad you like it :)
Perhaps they have slipped through your fingers.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

So they did...
I yearned to ease your pain;
your sufferings
added to my burdens

This is so perfect to me, like loving someone so much that they're almost a part of you. Like you share in their good and bad times like they're your own. But it surely does hurt to lose someone and feel like you've lost a part of yourself as well.
I like this!(:

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You've summed it up so accurate. I completely agree.
Thank you so much for the appreciation .. read more
Beautiful... fantastic... engaging...
"That fear of losing you,
kept me from
breathing freely..."
Yumna! This verse made me breath heavy... omg... lol... This poem was outstanding! This poem, as a free verse, wow... Perfect! :)
Keep it up!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Shaan! I'm glad you like it.
Means a lot 😊😊
Very beautiful​.... Thanks for sharing this lovely piece, very poetic, makes my heart smile to read such wonderful words

Poeticme

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you. I appreciate your words. 😊
It's like you kept your heart outside...The words gorgeously knit together to create a great meaning out of true feelings...The feeling of loosing someone, the one whom we used to love the most, more than ourselves and the pain of loosing that person...The feeling of getting dumped and the fear of breaking dreams....Very well presented ...All the best for your upcoming work...Waiting eagerly for them

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Not true feelings.. Just wordplays. But I'm glad you felt the impact of them. Thank you for the appr.. read more
The wonderful Donovan wrote 'You might as well try and catch the wind...' - your sentiments here echo this somewhat and the reader is left in no doubt that such wisdom - such an epiphany - such a revelation is bought at a very high price - heartbreak.
Lovely relatable piece my friend :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Lol where? I have forgotten.. Should be reading again the 'facts' 😉😂
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

Don't worry. When your biog is written I'll make sure the author sticks to the facts and keep Dan th.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Hahahah it would be good if you yourself wrote it 😛😉
Powerful and honest journey in the emotion of love my friend.
"I'm left, now...
staring at my empty hands,
which once held those dreams of us
...together"
The above lines. Hard place to find and know. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, Coyote! Always appreciate your words 😊😊
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome my friend.
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I could feel your emotions while reading through your poem. Beautiful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for liking. I appreciate your words :)

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