Empty Hands

Empty Hands

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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  Empty Hands


Empty hands...

where once I held

those dreams of us.


Those dreams,

dreamt in twilight,

between waking

and falling asleep...


that feeling of being whole,

fulfilled;

yet, so empty...

like you can't get enough

of what you crave

the most.


I yearned to ease your pain;

your sufferings

added to my burdens.


That fear of losing you,

kept me from

breathing freely...


and, you didn't let me,

even though

I asked to be let soothe

your aching heart,

you pushed me right out...


as I watched those dreams

fall off my hands,

disappearing

into a never ending mist

of oblivion. 


I'm left, now...

staring at my empty hands,

which once held those dreams of us

...together




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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That fear of losing you, kept me from breathing freely...
You didn't let me. Even though I asked to let me soothe your aching heart. You pushed me right out, as I watched those dreams fall off my hands... disappearing into a never ending mist of oblivion


Mmmm this speaks to my soul yumna....feel like you wrote it only for me .... :)
I love how deeply you get into the subject... and love reading your work...keep sharing your wonderful work ..

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Ria! Your words mean a lot to me 😊😊



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Sadness wrapped tightly in intelligent mystique is how I would describe this. This is great. Nice job

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciation, duff! I'm glad you liked it 😊
duff

7 Months Ago

You are very welcome my friend! I forgot to mention I like the artwork too
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I like it too 😊
Lost love is often the stuff of poetry and here you capture the sense of loss very powerfully. 'I watched those dreams/ fall off my hands' - poignant words.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

It is indeed.. Thank you for appreciating, Jibey. I'm glad it touched you :)
Beautiful string of thoughts that you drew between both the ends of the poem. And I see that you did not stick to a single emotion across the poem. It is indeed a versatile piece. One small correction I think is...No need of the word time after twilight. Twilight itself is a time of the day. Very well done.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

You are indeed correct about the error. I overlooked it..
Thank you so much for the appreciat.. read more
You use your experience to create the most stunning romances.
This is poignant and filled with a sense of ultimate loss. Wonderful is perhaps not the right word for such a sad piece but I hope you know what I mean.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Ken! I truly appreciate your words 😊
How your words felt like a path, at once worn down, and yet at times wild in the meadow. And how the path seemed to end in an empty, barren place where even in the looking back, one got lost in the longing. So beautifully bittersweet.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

At times, loves leaves us like that...
So very thankful for your beautiful thoughts here, Cra.. read more
An owl on the moon

7 Months Ago

Yes, it's too true. And somehow it lingers on in those distant dreams.
That fear of losing you, kept me from breathing freely...
You didn't let me. Even though I asked to let me soothe your aching heart. You pushed me right out, as I watched those dreams fall off my hands... disappearing into a never ending mist of oblivion


Mmmm this speaks to my soul yumna....feel like you wrote it only for me .... :)
I love how deeply you get into the subject... and love reading your work...keep sharing your wonderful work ..

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 7 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Ria! Your words mean a lot to me 😊😊
Achingly beautiful. I have the feels. :) Well done.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad it touched you 😊
I can feel this writing coursing through me, for it seems I keep taking the position of the person who shuts others out. This is interesting for me to be able to see this contrasting perspective and affect I may have.
Thank you for the read YumnaKay.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I have been often enough at the other end but now, at the receiving end makes the blow fall harder.... read more

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