Heaven on Earth

Heaven on Earth

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Heaven on Earth

All attempts at saving my heart
 from the inevitable failed.
And I fell headfirst 
into the pool of your charms.

You wove a spell, 
surrounded me with your words;
and I, helpless
at the magic that was cast...

beckoning me into 
the warmth of your touch,
which makes my heart aflutter,
leaving me restless;
and wildly so, 
as I await your next touch 
and the traces 
it leaves on my slightly moist skin; 
anticipating
as to the wonders we have 
yet to discover...

I delve deeper, 
not knowing 
where it would lead us,
and with the belief only 
that it will be okay as long as 
we're together...

I smile as our hands intertwine; 
and it feels already like
Heaven on Earth...




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Just words...

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Absolutely beautiful. This is one of those rare pieces that successfully captures a moment's beauty in its essence, and pulls the reader into every detail. I envisioned this like an emotional scene in a movie, with both the action and feeling prevalent throughout. Great job at creating that effect.

A minor quibble: The line "which makes my heart aflutter" took me out of the moment for some reason. Not sure why. Suggestion: making my heart aflutter.

- William Liston

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating, William. I'm glad that effect carried out well.
As for your sugg.. read more



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Words... and dreamy thoughts.. flowing naturally from your heart. You have created a beautiful idyll... love's delight.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

I didn't think while writing this 😛
Thank you for the appreciation, Jibey 😊😊
It's truly heaven, if that is so....
That's romantic...I liked it...:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Yes, it does feel like it..
Thank you, Surya. Glad you liked it 😊

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