Heaven on Earth

Heaven on Earth

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Heaven on Earth

All attempts at saving my heart
 from the inevitable failed.
And I fell headfirst 
into the pool of your charms.

You wove a spell, 
surrounded me with your words
and I, helpless
at the magic that was cast...

beckoning me into 
the warmth of your touch,
which makes my heart aflutter,
leaving me restless
and wildly so, 
as I await your next touch 
and the traces 
it leaves on my slightly moist skin, 
anticipating
as to the wonders we have 
yet to discover...

I delve deeper, 
not knowing 
where it would lead us,
and with the belief only 
that it will be okay as long as 
we're together...

I smile as our hands intertwine
and it feels already like
Heaven on Earth...




© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Just words...

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Absolutely beautiful. This is one of those rare pieces that successfully captures a moment's beauty in its essence, and pulls the reader into every detail. I envisioned this like an emotional scene in a movie, with both the action and feeling prevalent throughout. Great job at creating that effect.

A minor quibble: The line "which makes my heart aflutter" took me out of the moment for some reason. Not sure why. Suggestion: making my heart aflutter.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for appreciating, William. I'm glad that effect carried out well.
As for your sugg.. read more



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Ooooo a very sweet (& cheesy) write! ;) I thought this flowed wonderfully and provoked such beautiful images! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Oh lol I'm still waiting for your 'cheesy' one 😉😂
Thank you, Kesha! I'm glad you liked.. read more
Kesha

1 Year Ago

You're welcome & thanks for reminding me lol I completely forgot! I will work on it tomorrow morning.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Cool! 😉😊
Words... and dreamy thoughts.. flowing naturally from your heart. You have created a beautiful idyll... love's delight.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I didn't think while writing this 😛
Thank you for the appreciation, Jibey 😊😊
It's truly heaven, if that is so....
That's romantic...I liked it...:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes, it does feel like it..
Thank you, Surya. Glad you liked it 😊

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