Oozing

Oozing

A Poem by YumnaKay
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Experimental Writing.

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Words, fragmented ... still they broke me 

yours, pierced ... holding stitches on my side


which constantly bleeds, oozing...

 

feelings, evoked ... mere vapours ~

wisps; evaporated ... 

 

your words ~ my undoing.  


© 2017 YumnaKay



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I like this a lot because it's simple and short but at the same time, complex and deep. I love your word choice and overall the piece really flows. I also like your use of punctuation and how well you showed emotion. Amazing job and keep writing! :)

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

4 Days Ago

Thank you for appreciating this piece, Chloe. Glad you liked it :)
Chloe Powell

3 Days Ago

Thank you for creating it!
Left me wondering if this was about love or pain - read it several times and each left me feeling a different emotion. well done.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

4 Days Ago

This was more about the pain felt in love. Thank you for thoughts on this piece. Glad the emotions w.. read more
YumnaKay

4 Days Ago

*your
Its a different poem, Yumna...
I loved it!
Great work...:)

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

5 Days Ago

Thank you, Naat. Appreciate your words here :))
Neetha

4 Days Ago

my pleasure...
we keep wrapping our hearts in protective bandage...but some loves and those loves' words can split the bandages apart, tear the seams of the old wounds...and we bleed again.

quite visual here.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

5 Days Ago

True indeed. Thank you for your thoughts here, Jacob. Truly appreciate it :)
What an amazing placing of words! Strange how brevity and a pause can light up meanings. Fine experiment, Yumna.. seems you can go all over space with your imagination.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

Thank you for your appreciation, Emma. Truly means a lot that you like my experimental writes. 😊
This reminded me of some lines of lyrics from ‘The Last Time’ by RIHANNA:
Boy I thought that I knew you so very well
But you walked on my pride all the tears that I cried
And it cuts... like a knife
Excellently penned!


Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

I haven't heard that song so thank you for sharing. I'll be sure to listen :) This write was probabl.. read more
It's amazing how simple words can do so much damage or even the lack of words which can hurt just as much...wonderful piece dear friend, sorry I have been busy as of late. 2 days off after today's shift :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kesha

1 Week Ago

You're welcome and yes I am excited lol I am soooo tired today /:
YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Lol maybe you'll get tired of resting too in your off hahah 😛😛
Kesha

1 Week Ago

Haha maybe xD
Now this is pretty cool, adore the lilting word choice, and the fact it IS about words... Evaporation of feeling bleeds through like oozing piercings... Piercingly penned...

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Wow, thank you. I like your review. Glad you liked the word choices here. :)
Silente

6 Days Ago

I very much did...! You are welcome...
Truly words do have an ipmact...
I liked it...:)

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you, Surya. Glad you liked it 😊
This is an interesting assortment of tactile observations conveyed using good imagery. I like the word arrangements that combine sights & sounds (evoked, evaporated, vapours) of the actual words themselves being part of the imagery.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you for your interpretation of this piece, BG. Always appreciate it 😊

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