Rejection

Experimental yet again...

Fresh tears roll 

​from​

 my eyes

​,​

​the

 salty taste bitter on my lips

​,​

​t​

he reason of them 

​~​

 you

​.​

Shattered I am

​ ---

 like tiny shards of glass

​.​

​M​

y 

heart ~​​ 

crumbling within

​,​

  

the 

​'​

whys

​'​

 piercing

​ ​

my soul

​,​

clawing deep inside

~ this feeling of rejection ~

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Rejection.

Many of us have been there, others are lucky and may never taste the bitterness and heartache of it all.

What you have done her is capture the gutwrenching feeling with few words. I'll always come back to your work, not because I find your messages easy to understand, but your words which you use in these type of pieces are always seemingly perfect for the content of the piece.

Always a fan.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hello, Mark! Thank you for always appreciating my scribbles! Glad you like it 😊

[matrixmark]

Scribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong point of mine. But you always seem to nail it.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ lol maybe we could swap hahah

[matrixmark]

Would you like me to answer that....lol

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol maybe ;) :p

[matrixmark]

But it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do anything poetic.

Heres my poem for the year.

My name is ray,
way hey hey!!!

lol.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmaoo! Well at least you can rhyme 😛😉😂

[matrixmark]

That's my best. I thought it was funny, made me giggle a bit too.

Mark.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a thick handkerchief isn't enough to soak up the sadness oozing from this one.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here, Jacob.

[swati]

Its a common feeling what everyone get when they are rejected. Nice one.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Indeed.
Thank you for liking :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Feeling of rejection grows stronger with time...I really liked this one.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would say one can overcome that feeling with time..
Thank you for liking :)

[Najam Us Saher]

It would take so much courage and blessings to do so. You are most welcome ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh yes, if one is strong then it's easy I guess...

[Ken Simm.]

The stark, dark beauty of melancholy. Rejection is one of those things that never gets easier.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, it isn't. Thank you for your words here, Ken.

[SSKaitlyn]

The flow is good, the meaning clear and beautifully written, and the emotion is heart rendering. Well done, love.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for reading and liking. Truly appreciate your words here 😊

[barleygirl]

Being rejected by someone you care about really does create a sharp physical pain for me. I think it's interesting to just look at this one little slice of life with a magnifying glass. When you put "experimental" to describe your poems, it reminds me of Coyote John putting "just words" . . . maybe you should make this your permanent byline! *wink! wink!* Good sensory details to show taste & physicality of psychic pain.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting idea! Maybe I should make it my tagline 😉😊

Thank you for your thoughts on this one, BG. Always appreciate your words 😊

[barleygirl]

"experimental etchings of emotion" (OK, maybe too much alliteration?) *wink! wink!*

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha no 😛 that's what it is kind of... I seem to get too emotional in writing than I actually am 😛😶