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This was (not) the perfume of your love

This was (not) the perfume of your love

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental.

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Star gazing
the nightly sky,

this hazy mist
lifted

while

I am
getting accustomed;

as

I sense a rancid, 
putrid smell ... 

mistaken for ---

 the perfume of your love ~



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Might add on to this some time later...

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It is a thin line that divides the two extremes isn't it? And here you have expressed it so well.

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

True, and how often we stray towards the other end...
Thank you for appreciating, Ken.
Love/Hate- the two sided coin so well-expressed , by scent!, in this poem. The "perfume of your love" morphs into "a rancid, putrid smell" of love lost...yes! Perfect!

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

It is indeed a two sided coin. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and for liking :)
Some great thoughts which are very creative!
I really liked this Yumna!
When that perfume you love, turns out to be the perfume you hate later on...
Keep it up

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it :)
Ouch! Expressive words that say it all, Yumna. Can only pray they're a poet's ripe imagination.

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Ahh, how I wish that they were only imagination but sadly it is the truth written here...
Th.. read more
even the clearest sky can have pollution in it, when it comes to love...we just don't see it until it overwhelms us...
j.

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Couldn't have said it better myself.. Thank you for your thoughts, Jacob.
It's a sad thing when that sweet perfume goes sour. You have summed it up well in this short little gem. I wouldn't add on to it. I think it is perfect. :) Julie

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Yes, it does get sour sometimes...
thank you for your words here, Julie. Truly appreciate it .. read more
Simple, elegant and deep. I really liked this piece... "the perfume of your love" amazing.. 😊

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Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

just some random thoughts, Kesha ;)
thank you for liking :) I'd rather stay away from that p.. read more
Kesha

5 Months Ago

You're welcome and haha yes you should ;p

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