till it's time ~ to sleep

till it's time ~ to sleep

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Again, written hastily... I'm probably sleep deprived ;P

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wrap me in 
thunder clouds
raging ... ravaging ... 

fill me in
forgotten smiles
chuckling ... laughing ...

tuck me in
flowery blankets
caressing ... soothing ...

till it's time ~ to sleep 




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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I enjoyed this. The images are vivid and serene, even in the first stanza where you describe thunderous clouds. I like the uniform structure throughout as well as the virtual lack of punctuation in how it creates a disorganized feel, almost reflective of how one feels when sleep deprived. Overall, a soft write with a hint of madness. Well penned!

- William Liston

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, William. I really didn't think out the structure while writing... But I'm glad you like i.. read more



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So dreamy and soft... that's how I felt after reading this Yumna
Such imagery you've provided, those emotions that surrender the reader!
Well done, keep it up!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for appreciating, Shaan :)
Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

No problem :)
This was beautiful and almost relaxing, I loved the images you painted with your words, great piece

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you. I appreciate your words here :))
Kesha

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)
I enjoyed this. The images are vivid and serene, even in the first stanza where you describe thunderous clouds. I like the uniform structure throughout as well as the virtual lack of punctuation in how it creates a disorganized feel, almost reflective of how one feels when sleep deprived. Overall, a soft write with a hint of madness. Well penned!

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, William. I really didn't think out the structure while writing... But I'm glad you like i.. read more
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This was a good write yumna. You painted a beautiful story in short words!

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Bev! Glad you like it :))
if sleep deprivation creates the above, you should ne'er sleep again, Yumna. This is silky beautiful and creates such colourful thoughts.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

This made me smile :) thank you for this lovely review, Emma. Truly appreciate your words. I'll try .. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Yes, yes. please do. Now the cricket's done for now, you can doze occasionally!

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Experimental Poetry


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Dr. YumnaKay
Dr. YumnaKay

Pakistan



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