In midnight blue ...

In midnight blue ...

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimenting with rhyming for a change...

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~ In midnight blue, she draped and strolled ~

Thinking of the nights past gone,
the times when the world seemed oh, so bright;
and feelings were what gave her delight.

All now left was just remorse, 
remembrance of past doings made her fraught;
and regret was ~ her only thought.

~ in midnight blue, she draped and strolled ~



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This takes me back to a time
when all I did was rhyme
Then I embraced free verse
I don't know which was worse !! lmao xD

I like how the opening and closing lines could almost be the edges of the path along which this sad and contemplative walk occurs Yumna.

Yes it's nice to see rhymes - sometimes...
:)

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Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

It's one of those skills that we wish we didnt have - lol - like being able to make farts under our .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I can do neither haha 😛😛 but yeah I can imagine you being good at that too ;) :p
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

I can do one of them but the other is a physical impossibilty and comes from this scene in "Earth Gi.. read more


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Very elegant wording and rhymes. The beautiful image and the calm blue font set the scene and tone, and the content matched perfectly.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for appreciating. Glad you like it (:
I like the way you close and end on the same phrase. I've seen this in a few of your poems, and I like its looping back to say 'this is what I was talking about when I said it at the start'.

Those of a certain age and musical taste will remember Gladys Knight singing 'The way we were', which she starts with words very similar to your V1. As I read this my musical memory went back.

Not knowing what things your 'she' was regretting makes this a little hard. On lots of levels we have all done things we later regret, sometimes for years, but you just have to get on and try to be as best you can. That said, I have to acknowledge that there may be some 'past doings' that will forever haunt, and the quiet of midnight is just the time they may re-surface. Nicely done!

Regards Nigel

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you noticed that. It's more of an attempt to make my pieces more open ended if I want to co.. read more
Ahh, this is so refreshing to read. Beautiful image and font (blue is my favorite color) and smooth, calming words to match.
I very much enjoyed the rhyming in how it made the piece feel musical. Does this piece fit a particular form or did it originate within you .... I love the structure and may give it a whirl myself.

- William Liston

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

It did originate out of nowhere 'cause I didn't really have a structure in mind when I first wrote i.. read more
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Ty
Very calm, subtle, fluid write. Enjoyed it.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed 😊
I really enjoy this piece! Short,& elegant, I like the rhymes here too!

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Lol I thought rhyming would be fun for a change, glad it worked. Thank you for appreciating 😊😊
Kesha

1 Year Ago

Haha yeah I can't rhyme worth crap so you did wonderful :) and you're welcome :)
I think your rhymes work well. Sometimes a good rhyme gives emphasis to the meaning. Hence 'bright delight' turns into 'fraught thought', as she strolls along, draped in midnight blue. What a clever poem, and a joy to read.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for liking, GAA. I appreciate your words here 😊
Wow, a breathtaking poem with beautiful imagery and mix of emotions involved...
I really enjoyed reading this Yumna!
Well done, keep it up!

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Shaan :)
Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

No problem :)
This takes me back to a time
when all I did was rhyme
Then I embraced free verse
I don't know which was worse !! lmao xD

I like how the opening and closing lines could almost be the edges of the path along which this sad and contemplative walk occurs Yumna.

Yes it's nice to see rhymes - sometimes...
:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

It's one of those skills that we wish we didnt have - lol - like being able to make farts under our .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I can do neither haha 😛😛 but yeah I can imagine you being good at that too ;) :p
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

I can do one of them but the other is a physical impossibilty and comes from this scene in "Earth Gi.. read more
Love the beautiful "Blue Lady" image and wistful poem. Eloquent, elegant and sad. Lovely flow and rhyme- good job with that my friend! Brava!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Annette. I'm glad you like this effort. I appreciate your words here 😊
Come to life sorry typo
Great poem

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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