One more time ...

One more time ...

A Chapter by Dr YumnaKay
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Experimental. Sounds depressing but that's kinda the mood I am in lately...

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One more time,
life crawls
as I remain edgy.

One more time,
your total silence
bounds me.

One more time,
I am drowning in
a web of miseries.


So, will you be back
~
one more time


One more time,
nights stroll
while I dream on.

One more time,
I lapse into
a never ending solitude.

One more time,
a kaleidoscope of promises
surround me.

So, will you hold me
~
one more time ...




© 2017 Dr YumnaKay



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"life crawls
as I remain edgy."

Absolutely best way to describe certain moods that come accompany depression and anxiety.

Moods usually pass, otherwise they become syndromes! I hope that's the case with you. You're a talented writer and if someone doesn't seem to appreciate you in all your tattered, flawed and wondrous glory - kill 'em in a poem! *laughing* I'm feelin' real maternal today, so I'll just say "Cheer up, honey. It'll work it self out...or not. Either way, you'll be fine."

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

I wish I could really kill with my poems lol but sadly sometimes words seem too lame...
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touched once again.
you always write attractive.


Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your words here. I appreciate it :)
A web of miserably promised night strolls... Or are they just lapses in drowning... One more time, and i am... Edgy. Dreamily penned...

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

It was kinda depressingly penned lol but yeah it comes off as dreamy too...
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Silente

10 Months Ago

Mostly your words, heh, and you are most welcome...
i don't find this to be depressing. longing & dreamy perhaps. endearing. smooth, lovely writing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Yes, I think it could be interpreted that way too. I'm glad you didn't find it depressing. Thank you.. read more
There are eight more times here - not including the title and yet with that special someone - that person who we feel 'gets us' liek not other, even 8 times might not make us turn away from them forever.
Perhaps it's witchcraft or some other higher power at work but as Elvis might have sang "We're caught in a trap!"...thank u very much... uh-huh

well done here Yumna.
:)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Lol I just noticed that :p
And I agree, an eternity of one more times would be insufficient f.. read more
Poetic summary of when you are frightened to do something again because you had an unpleasant experience doing it the first time! Loved the flow of this write – a rhythmic pulse of energy pin pointing the flaws in an on/off relationship! :-)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

I love how you interpret and summarize my writes and others' pieces in general!
Thank you for.. read more
An evocative use of repetition here Yumna. The format helps both the flow and the subject. Giving it a tangible wistfullness.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Ken. I appreciate your words here 😊
Very nice indeed.

Soft and gently flowing and tinged with a gentle sadness throughout. Usually repetition of the same line can be a drawback on a poem, but it works exceedingly well in this case.

A fine write. Melancholic and full of longing hope.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Doodley. I'm glad you think the repetition worked here 😊
I remember your poems back in the day. They were special but this, this is one of a kind. I love what the cafe has done for you. You have changed for the better. I also love that you are growing as a writer. The future looks bright for you, dear friend.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

I'm overwhelmed by your words, Gullia. Thank you so much 😘💜
Loved the repitition of 'one more time' I really liked this.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Najam. Glad you did :)
Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

You're welcome. ☺
Another dreamy, emotional and soft poem Yumna...
I really enjoyed reading this, and your emotions were clearly expressed and shown throughout this...
Well done, keep it up!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it.

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