Enraptured

Enraptured

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Another attempt at creating images. Not really satisfied...

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An ethereal morning ... frenzies of delight;
followed by a trickle of heavy breaths. 

A vast horizon ... momentary silence;
followed by a rushing wave of emotions.

A waning, gibbous moon ... night whispers;
followed by clouds of silver linings. 


~ exhilarated, enthralled, enraptured ~



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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An emotional, cool and wavy adventure that leads on to the night and explains how the person feels in 3 words.... such a creative piece tbh Yumna!
I'm satisfied with all your poems cuz I can see the effort you put into them!
Well done, keep it up! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you appreciate 😊
Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

No problem :)



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Amazing use of words dear friend.
~" exhilarated, enthralled, enraptured ~"
Three powerful words above. I liked them. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

12 Months Ago

I think so too regarding those words. Thank you for appreciating (:
Coyote Poetry

12 Months Ago

I did and you are welcome my friend.
enjoyed your work, if you have time please check out my writing and leave a review

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed (:
I'll be sure to :)
very nice!!!!!! i didn't know you can make a movie into poems!! all the exhilarating emotion coming at you like in a movie scene FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

That's a very flattering comment. Thank you for appreciating. Glad you like it (:
Wow! Beautiful word play and creatively done.these three words are themselves powerful enough to influence! You said it all!
Personification. Rain pours heavily, stops and then wave flows.
Relatable.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Tazeen. Glad you can relate. I appreciate your words here 😊
The melding of one day's experience encapsulated through three words - breath-taking write! :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Phill. Glad you like it (:
I like what you're doing here. Your barely-there descriptions definitely bring on the ideas of sensual exploration without taking a specific path, leaving the specifics to the reader. I'm just not sure about the last line . . . I love these words, but they are more "cerebral" than the rest of your poem, which is more sensory. I thought about -- what if you put one of the multi-syllabic "e" words in between each stanza, just one stand-alone word in each spot? Just an idea.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Your idea was initially my idea too when I first wrote it, I did write those words in between but I .. read more
I'm with Jacob. This is a soft - like a big comfy pillow, and it still retains the passion of the 'before'.
Yes imagery is generated in each case then overall the feeling of love and contentment swathes the reader. Top notch!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

That's a great comment! Thank you for appreciating, Tony! (and the suggestion too) ;) glad you like .. read more
Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

welcome Yumna.
A beautiful poem
followed by the the appropriate response:

Compact and complete. You accomplished your mission of creating images. They come spontaneously to the mind - a hallmark of good work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Carol, thank you so much. Your appreciation means a lot to me. Glad you like it 😊
it's almost like the morning after---and how everything looks different....more beautiful---the ecstasy carries over. This creates a soft, contented mood.

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you for appreciating, Jacob 😊
An emotional, cool and wavy adventure that leads on to the night and explains how the person feels in 3 words.... such a creative piece tbh Yumna!
I'm satisfied with all your poems cuz I can see the effort you put into them!
Well done, keep it up! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you appreciate 😊
Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

No problem :)

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