Crevices

Crevices

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Dawn scribbles.

"
through the soft crevices
of the night,


I sense the air thick
with your morning breath
enclosed within

layer upon layers
of confessions
brought to life;
 

through the soft crevices
of the night,


I read the verses unread
as you exhale
under your slightly

quivering lips
up till now
enshrouded within;


through the soft crevices
of the night.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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There is a real hypnagogic feel to this - could be real or dreamed... Class!

I'm glad I did that found poetry piece out of your titles wayyy back when you were just a pup. There's no way I would even attempt it with the list on the right e.g. "Search Me...Oozing...Crevices...One More Time...Till It's Time to Sleep" - could get me jailed!!!




Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Errr lol sounds too scientific now 😎😛
Tony Jordan

2 Months Ago

Haha - well poetry is an art and a science ;p
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Lol you just made that amendment! 😎😛



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There is a real hypnagogic feel to this - could be real or dreamed... Class!

I'm glad I did that found poetry piece out of your titles wayyy back when you were just a pup. There's no way I would even attempt it with the list on the right e.g. "Search Me...Oozing...Crevices...One More Time...Till It's Time to Sleep" - could get me jailed!!!




Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Errr lol sounds too scientific now 😎😛
Tony Jordan

2 Months Ago

Haha - well poetry is an art and a science ;p
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Lol you just made that amendment! 😎😛
I agree with Sapientiam that your poetry does seem to have this mysterious and somewhat cryptic feel to it. It always makes me think about the meaning and message being conveyed. Very well done.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Hahah well, I used to be pretty much simple before I became all cryptic :p lol thank you so much for.. read more
Sinbulvinter

2 Months Ago

You're very welcome. I always like your poetry.
this reminds me of the first nights with someone....that pillow talk, happens after the physical closeness....the conversation brings the emotional closeness...the confessions , each really getting to know and understand the other.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

That's a lovely interpretation. Thank you for your words here, Jacob. I appreciate it 😊
I need to review your stuff more often because I've been reading your poetry and they are so professional. I love this one especially; romantic in a sense, yet, a bit mysterious to me. Your word choices bring out this nightly essence that contributes to the mysteriousness of it. This was very enjoyable to read... Well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

That's a great comment. I'm glad you find my pieces worth reading. Thank you so much for your lovely.. read more
I love your morning musings. I love so many lines in this I can't pick out one favorite. You did a beautiful job capturing that moment and allow the reader to feel it.. get lost in it.. well done..xo

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you for your lovely words here and for appreciating! 😊

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