Labyrinthine

Labyrinthine

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Inspired. Evening scribbles.

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in the sweet offing
of our love


the stars in your eyes
hold gossamer tears
ineffably; broken


in the sweet offing
of our love


your voice, mellifluous;
clings like a hazy mist,
labyrinthine; fragmented


in the sweet offing
of our love



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Not sure about this. Might be tinkering with it later...

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Oh I dunno. I'd be very satisfied with producing this one Yumna. Spontaneity I feel is closest thing to our true Self - isn't that why the shrinks do that 'word association' game/exercise?
Overall this is a delicate piece that might float away altogether without the fastenings of the refrain.
:))

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

3 Months Ago

Yeah I think they have limited ap-peal, like bananas.

I personally find them to be l.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I was searching up old fashioned smileys lol didn't find any except this: 😛
Tony Jordan

3 Months Ago

:{D - note old fashioned handlebar moustache



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I liked this poem as-is. You set-up each emotion with delicate words and the meaning was sweet and clear. Perfect flow of thoughts led to the strong ending. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Coyote. Glad you like the emotions here (:
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I did and you are welcome dear poet.
It speaks well of your skills that you can use such words with such skill and flow as in this verse. And I don't think it needs much by way of tinkering.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this write and my skills, Ken. I'm humbled (:
Evening scribbles are the best! I like this one. It's not one of your best pieces but it has a certain charm to it that I really like.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

I agree, it ain't the best but I felt like writing it for the moment ;P
I'm glad you liked it.. read more
Oh I dunno. I'd be very satisfied with producing this one Yumna. Spontaneity I feel is closest thing to our true Self - isn't that why the shrinks do that 'word association' game/exercise?
Overall this is a delicate piece that might float away altogether without the fastenings of the refrain.
:))

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

3 Months Ago

Yeah I think they have limited ap-peal, like bananas.

I personally find them to be l.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I was searching up old fashioned smileys lol didn't find any except this: 😛
Tony Jordan

3 Months Ago

:{D - note old fashioned handlebar moustache

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Experimental Poetry


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