Checkmate

Checkmate

A Chapter by Closed
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Ramblings of a raging mind...

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I walk breathless, 
keeping within the circle of life, 
my laments go unheard 
as ​I suffocate, run loose and 
eventually break free...
love binds in ways 
I couldn't fathom before, 
tormenting; and I'm caught off guard 
as life calls - checkmate!



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One can feel your ramblings, wanderings over Life's board, your feet growing weary in the chase. It can be like this too often, play by play, move by move, ultimately yielding to the game. Your poetry, your phrases, your dark song is so powerfully confessed, dear Yumna. I can only hope you get to kick Life's butt next time. Believe me, there's always a next time.

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Closed

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words here and for the nice wishes, Craig. Truly appreciated 😊
An owl on the moon

4 Months Ago

Very happy to send boxes of joy across the sea, Yumna. 😊



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Yeah, life can seem to taunt unmercifully sometimes as if testing. You intrigue 'Life' and so it selects you for some of it's prime sadistic treatment - 'let's see how hard you reallllly are then...?'
I think to be fair it then rewards if you triumph without going over to the dark-side (sheesh it's always Star Wars with me ...lol)

Great imagery - finely penned Yumna as always-ish
;pp


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Tony Jordan

4 Months Ago

Haha - perhaps it was Titanic...lol
Closed

4 Months Ago

That would be too much, titanic as a novel grrrr
Tony Jordan

4 Months Ago

Have to read it in the bath...haha
One can feel your ramblings, wanderings over Life's board, your feet growing weary in the chase. It can be like this too often, play by play, move by move, ultimately yielding to the game. Your poetry, your phrases, your dark song is so powerfully confessed, dear Yumna. I can only hope you get to kick Life's butt next time. Believe me, there's always a next time.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words here and for the nice wishes, Craig. Truly appreciated 😊
An owl on the moon

4 Months Ago

Very happy to send boxes of joy across the sea, Yumna. 😊
Ramblings perhaps but, an emotionl poem.. whether true or othersise. Has an air of desperation perhaps.. 'Chekmate' has a finality to it.. both sides of the coin.
Life has a way of turning dreams upside down.

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Closed

4 Months Ago

My ramblings are always about what I feel/think at the moment of writing so yes, I think you summari.. read more
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emmajoy

4 Months Ago

Living in the now is a pretty good rule, Yumna - as long as one can cope!

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