Disguised

Disguised

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Fantasizing about death (?) not to be taken as suicidal lol Just playing with some images in my (weird) mind. Also experimenting with giving (dreamy) poetry another shot...

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death of a love 
dreamt atop 
                          candy clouds 

and waffled oceans


death of a heart
now hardened 
                          with time

and glaciers which melt


death ever so near
in pale pink and 

frilled attires 
                        ~ disguised




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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I really enjoyed reading this piece, especially the broken narrative that gave pause to the thoughts as they were coming into the reader's mind. Well done. I would have liked to see you go farther with it as I was kind of disappointed when it came to an end, but nice nevertheless.

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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Ah, well I always end up short of coming up with words to continue with my pieces. Most of my pieces.. read more



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Your new poetry. Powerful and worthwhile. You made your point and feeling come alive for the reader. Most of us are wearing disguised. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the outstanding poetry. No wasted words in the poem.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Aye, true regarding us wearing disguises... thank you so much for your kind words, Coyote. Appreciat.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Always my pleasure and you are welcome.
For some reason i expected you to write more.. but to do so by drifting off and away, gazing back at.. whatever. Think you've left this open to further thought by self rather than for readers. Perhaps.

Meantime, what's before me, i find intriguing because it sets a grey emotion in a bright frame. Indeed, your disguise has worked.. ..

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

2 Months Ago

My favourite word: Probably!
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Hahah I thought it was: perhaps ;) ;P
emmajoy

2 Months Ago

'Perhaps' is my second favourite!!! Must shhh now, your writing is too important to step into humo.. read more
A very successful experimental write in my honest opinion.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating. Glad you think so 😊
"death of a heart
now hardened
with time"

Or in my case, exchanged for a thumpin' gizzard! I, too, liked the format, gives the reader time to digest/process/absorb both images and emotions.
Another gem in your literary crown.



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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Haha a thumpin' gizzard won't be a bad idea either ;) :P
Thank you for appreciating this one.. read more
oooooooooooooooo i like it .. i like the imagery and language and the free verse is suited well to your poem .. glad i came to read ... very creative and inspiring to me!
E.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

The structure is actually inspired by another writer friend but I'm glad you found it inspiring. Mos.. read more
I like this.
I like to observe digital TVs as they try to handle the massive amounts of information in a scene which includes the ocean because the ocean has so much going on at once - the TV's decoder tries to fill in and recreate it but it's digital limitations and artifacts do indeed represent it as 'waffly'.
Only now on 4K vision does it seem natural.

As Coolio once said "Death aint nothing but a heartbeat away ..." no wonder it is such a common topic of thought. Dreams of death are usually a sign of moving on - leaving an old life behind.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

*grabs a tissue and sniffs


Lol jk, of course, TJ. Beyond any riches. Ditto, .. read more
Tony Jordan

2 Months Ago


aww..(hugs)
right...Okay...but you still gotta send the money
;p
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

:p hahaha sure ;)
I really enjoyed reading this piece, especially the broken narrative that gave pause to the thoughts as they were coming into the reader's mind. Well done. I would have liked to see you go farther with it as I was kind of disappointed when it came to an end, but nice nevertheless.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Ah, well I always end up short of coming up with words to continue with my pieces. Most of my pieces.. read more
"death ever so near
in pale pink and

frilled attires
~ disguised"

How often it is, dear friend. death of love, friendship, relationship, and persons, is painful.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

It is, painful indeed. Thank you for your words here. I appreciate.

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