Stranger

Stranger

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Sensual write.

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I am a stranger to my own sufferings, 
held bare and unmoved, I feed off rage, 
the aftertaste of anger, still bitter on my tongue. 

I am a stranger to my ardent desires, 
still I feast my eyes, thriving off the digital images, 
and there remains a yearning, unfulfilled,

upon which lingers the sweet agony; 
the thought of you trickling against my skin,
while this shaking heart ~ cradles your memories ...



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Strange, strange how words real and make believe alter emotions in self, in others.. but without them, i spose there'd be no questions asked, just fruitless acceptance. Think that's what you mean in this part sad, par sensual write.. as always finely laid.

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Dr. YumnaKay

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Sometimes it's easier writing out what one wishes to be, at others not so much... Thank you for your.. read more



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Strange, strange how words real and make believe alter emotions in self, in others.. but without them, i spose there'd be no questions asked, just fruitless acceptance. Think that's what you mean in this part sad, par sensual write.. as always finely laid.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Weeks Ago

Sometimes it's easier writing out what one wishes to be, at others not so much... Thank you for your.. read more
I thoroughly enjoyed this and am truly delighted to have stumbled upon it during my meanderings here. Many thanks, Neville

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Dr. YumnaKay

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Thank you so much for appreciating, Neville. Glad you enjoyed reading it (:
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Ja
A stranger unto thy self
Quite a realization in itself
To know and know not
Is quite the thought

Thank you kindly for your composition





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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you for this poetic appreciation (:
It's unusual the way your poem starts out with a stark mood in the first stanza, then it gradually changes into sensual as it goes along. Your message hints at the way a good loving session can help melt thru a bad mood. Always enjoy the way your writing leaves space for interpretation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for your words here, BG. Glad you like it. Always appreciated x
"I am a stranger to my ardent desire"
Wow!! Beautifully penned. Lovely!❤❤

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Ghania. As always, appreciated (:
Soft, sensitive and wanting words. I liked them dear friend. You made the emotion come alive for the reader. Strong closing to the amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating, Coyote 😊
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

You are welcome my friend. I loved your work today. I will return and read more later.
Sounds like a deep yearning for someone that was once special in your life.an enjoyable read.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

Thank you, KC. Glad you enjoyed reading (:
First, congratulations, Doc. This is a good piece of work. There are a couple of little things. Line 2 "I freed myself OF rage. I think I would drop some of the connectives. "the aftertaste of raw anger" "thriving off digital imagers". This is exceptional. I like it.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

I did make some changes though not entirely on what you pointed out. I think 'feed off' reads better.. read more
Ted Kniffen

1 Month Ago

The re-write is excellent.

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