Painting a canvas of broken promises ...

Painting a canvas of broken promises ...

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Probably too fragmented but that's how my thoughts have been lately...

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Painting A Canvas of Broken Promises

For once, I undressed 
my emotions and laid them bare.
I set you free; the confines 
of my mind, a cage.

I watched you soar
high above, while I dipped
my fingers, painting a canvas
of broken promises.

I left my mind, straying away
from the void buried deep;
you are drug to my craving heart, 
it whispers ~ a quiet amen.



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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Moving, deeply emotional poem. The confrontation with oneself at the stripped bare level is daunting. Lovely language, form, flow, metaphor, imagery. “fingers painting a canvas of broken promises”- resonates...wishing you well in letting them go my friend...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Annette :)



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Whoa I love this. It's beautiful.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Wonderful use of words dear friend.
"my fingers, painting a canvas
of broken promises."
Us writers paint with our paper and pen. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I agree! Thank you so much for liking :)
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

I liked this chapter and you are welcome my friend.
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BBP
This was a very rare and soul bearing piece. It was beautifully written and I loved the title!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Bev! And I love your new profile photo :D you look cool! ((:
BBP

11 Months Ago

aww thanks....btw.. I am cool! ;) hahaha
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

:p hahahah yeah I guess 😜😉
Very thoughtfully written. Great piece!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating, SS :)
i like this a lot...its honest, vulnerable and true to life ...universal layered and the language is elegant yet common .. its the way you put it together that gives it such swaying movement .. and i instantly like the right hand orientation and your opening "...undressed...." quickened my heart and got my attention..a fine use of personification ..well done..so moved in the reading
E.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your thoughts on this piece, Einstein. Glad you felt this way. Much appreciat.. read more
Moving, deeply emotional poem. The confrontation with oneself at the stripped bare level is daunting. Lovely language, form, flow, metaphor, imagery. “fingers painting a canvas of broken promises”- resonates...wishing you well in letting them go my friend...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Annette :)

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