Millennia

Millennia

A Chapter by Closed
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Experimental. Evening scribbles. Not sure about the structure ...

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December saps me
in dizzy
wakefulness,


and little by little, I shed,
over what seems
like a myriad of millennia,
yet the depths remain unreachable ...

broken laments
echo throughout, the quiet sea
reflecting alongside, the waves
still; I share my fears as


December saps me
in dizzy
wakefulness.



© 2018 Closed



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Your words move like dreamish music, carrying us all into that December place, that sighing world. So much on the surface, and the depths still beyond your grasp, moved over those waves. The sea holds my soul, so these words move me deeply. Thank you for this rich reflection of you.

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Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Craig. Always appreciated.



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Your words move like dreamish music, carrying us all into that December place, that sighing world. So much on the surface, and the depths still beyond your grasp, moved over those waves. The sea holds my soul, so these words move me deeply. Thank you for this rich reflection of you.

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2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Craig. Always appreciated.
You have a natural affinity to structure when it comes to presenting words. it would be truly interesting to hear you read this poem. It has a heart, a specific core connection to your thoughts about time. Might you consider using eg. vocaroo to record it? Meantime, your writing soars higher and higher!

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2 Weeks Ago

That's such a wonderful and humbling comment over my writing! Thank you so much for appreciating and.. read more
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emmajoy

2 Weeks Ago

Oh myy, that would be wonderful.. but, only if and when you want to, The words and their meanings .. read more
i like the structure...i am finding December to be a deep freeze of both emotions and words...
and i am awake, but feel half asleep most of the time...
creatively....
nicely done...

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3 Weeks Ago

I do actually relate to that, words froze for me too for a while.. hopefully it gets better in the n.. read more
As you know, I'm not a scholarly poet. So, I won't comment on the structure, except that it works fine (whatever happens when the words hit the screen/paper works for me).

I like this poem. I'm confident it speaks to many people. In fact, as I read your words, I realized you had captured what I've felt. You write so well, and every read gives me more inspiration. Nice piece.

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3 Weeks Ago

And neither am I, my friend. Guess we all are here to learn and grow as writers together :)
I.. read more

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Added on December 31, 2017
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Experimental Poetry


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Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



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