Damn this heart...!

Damn this heart...!

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Prose poetry. Experimenting still.

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Unearth me.
My pieces, still rough around the edges...
for I have been broken numerous times,
and in each piece, glimpses of you remain, eclipsed.

And if you are indeed a figment of my imagination
gone wild, then explain to me, this beating of
my heart, this trembling of my hands, this erratic
thudding of my pulse throbbing against my skin.

If you are indeed a figment of my imagination,
could this be? Could everything be
pieces of a dream afloat?

And if you are indeed a figment of my imagination,
then damn this heart! Damn this heart
of all reasons, for I have created
my personal damnation.



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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And if you are indeed a figment of my imagination gone wild, then explain to me, this beating of my heart, this trembling of my hands, this erratic thudding of my pulse throbbing against my skin....
Love this line -love the entire poem. So many great lines - Stunning work my friend, :) Julie

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this lovely review and for appreciating, Julie. Glad you like it :))
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Why is it exactly that we damn our hearts so? We act like they don't know exactly what makes us beat...exactly what breath we should take...exactly what flow to follow and what feeling to feel...without it would be a nothing...Your piece has thrown me into a roller coaster of thoughts, questions and feeling...self and science...as every piece should. Ty Yumna, as always Im a fan.

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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Perhaps, like everything, we try to put the blame on anything other than ourselves...
Thank .. read more
In every line there is the most beautiful, painful wonder, these questions of self and of your heart awakening into haunted places, longing places. Sometimes we create our own worlds to carry us to loving splendor... and sometimes we create our own worlds to lead us to our own demise. May your worlds ever bring you only light and peace, precious poet.

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

I couldn't agree more. Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Craig. Appreciated :)
An owl on the moon

6 Months Ago

Always thankful to see your words flowing, dear friend. :)
This is so beautiful, Yumna!!

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Ghania. Glad you appreciate :)
When I first started reading your poem, I was thinking: "why is this narrator messing around with this old memory -- why not stop wasting time & energy -- after being broken into pieces, the crusher does not deserve a place in this person's life!" And then your poem slowly gets around to exactly that realization, especially the last line, & it's very satisfying to have this realization becuz I get so tired of young people moping around over things that are done & over with! (Sorry, this is my response to an overload of heartbreak poems on this website). Well, at least your narrator is on her way to making herself free from the bad love addiction (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Your review made me smile. I abs agree with your analysis of how it is with the heartbreak poems (ev.. read more
You write with such sincerity, such gentle power, tears and smiles as if the best of friends.. don't know how you do it.. except that you, dear Yumna are a wonderful poet..

' .. damn this heart of all reasons, ~~ for I have created my personal damnation. ' How true is that.

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Your lovely words warm my heart, dear Em. That you think of me as a poet, that's one compliment whic.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

and oh, interestingly, you chose the lines which were rather spontaneous on my part :)
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

Spontaneity (sp) is far better than procrastination.. probably! xx
once it gets broken it is fragile,you tread softly

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Not always possible though... thank you so much for reading and your words here, Wordman. :)
 wordman

6 Months Ago

you`re welcome
Wow, this is a beautiful masterpiece! Magical, broken love and just oh, so, amazing. I'm proud of your writing journey dear friend. I love that you've made amazing progress. I fell in love with this piece and can't stop reading it.

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Ah, a wow from you indeed means a lot to me, Gullia! I'm glad you've been throughout to appreciate m.. read more
my curse is to love you, whether you really exist or not...such expressive words about a really wonderful kind of damnation....to love like this...that is a blessing.

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6 Months Ago

A blessing and a curse, both at the same time yeah... thank you so much for your words here, Jacob. .. read more
And if you are indeed a figment of my imagination gone wild, then explain to me, this beating of my heart, this trembling of my hands, this erratic thudding of my pulse throbbing against my skin....
Love this line -love the entire poem. So many great lines - Stunning work my friend, :) Julie

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Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this lovely review and for appreciating, Julie. Glad you like it :))
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