I do not exist ...

I do not exist ...

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Written in fragments.

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I left you alone,
last night.
I wander, lost.

I do not exist,
except in the
whites of your eyes,
sleeping quietly.

I do not exist,
except in the
midst of your dreams,
flitting out infrequently.

I do not exist,
except in the
softness of your breath,
my needs transparent.

I do not exist,
except in whispers
in the wind,
secretly spoken.

I do not exist elsewhere,
still, I wander, lost.
I left you alone,
last night...



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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I've read this three times and each im carried away in my longing thoughts and needing moments. I look back and realize that I have not left a review. I draw my attention back to how intensely somber each stroke of your words feel within me. I brush my hair back and focus my breathing again...wipe away that sneaky tear welling in the corner of my eye. All I can muster is the stillness...the knowing...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Your review in itself is very poetic. Thank you so much for reading and your lovely words here, Quee.. read more



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I like how the beginning and end was worded the same, like a snake biting its tail. Good use of commas. It made the reader slow down and enjoy the pauses. I liked it. CD

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

I've often used this style in my previous pieces too so thank you for appreciating that. I'm glad yo.. read more
I saw a bond between mother and child, a love often not reciprocated but appreciated. Don’t know why but each read was the same.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

That's an interesting take on this piece. Reading back, I realize it can be taken that way though of.. read more
Your words exist upon that spoken wind never forgotten and never a doubt of plea:)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words here :)
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4 Months Ago

Welcome:) your always worth the words
It would seem a love unrequited, or at least, unappreciated. A love left to wander in the dark. Very nice piece

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Unappreciated is how I'd explain it too. Thank you so much for reading this one and appreciating.
You find phrases born from thoughts most can't understand or ever will, Ever beautiful, mysterious, meaningful yet beyond range for us mere mortals. You sense what might be the right way to think and be but - leave open a route to... whereverr the answer lies, hidden.. waiting - love or loveless, a remedy to cure all need. Perhaps?

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Ah, I know, I'm guilty of writing what appears gibberish to most but I often don't realize it would .. read more
emmajoy

5 Months Ago

No, no, never gibberish but more deep as deep, needing thought and focus. We all need to share lov.. read more
The desire to be noticed, caught up, the center of someone else storm, its a definite bipolar moment in time, euphoric one minute at the possibility, and manic when the intentions just aren't there. Really sad tone and reticent pacing. Great work.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Crowley. :)
I've read this three times and each im carried away in my longing thoughts and needing moments. I look back and realize that I have not left a review. I draw my attention back to how intensely somber each stroke of your words feel within me. I brush my hair back and focus my breathing again...wipe away that sneaky tear welling in the corner of my eye. All I can muster is the stillness...the knowing...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Your review in itself is very poetic. Thank you so much for reading and your lovely words here, Quee.. read more
Delicate but carries the heat and intensity of longing. Your phrases create that mood effortlessly! I must say some of your phrases are very unique. Beautiful read. Many mahalo.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

That makes me smile. You actually understood the intention of this write quite nicely. Thank you so .. read more
still You are the BEST in this style, felt ethereal like a soft breath, felt mystical and mysterious yet clear as a real breath, very enjoyable read dear Yumna, bringing to Your page the emotions vibrant and sincere, we can't but to feel them.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

You humble me, dear friend. I try to experiment and learn more every day. I'm glad it made you feel .. read more
Outer body experiences, while you sleep. Interesting and thought-provoking, Nice read.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dawn

5 Months Ago

Sorry, I never picked up on your interpration of what you where seeking to project. Blushes.
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Nah, I like different interpretation than mine. :)
Dawn

5 Months Ago

Glad to hear it. Always the best way. As you find out other perspectives and thoughts. :)

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