Trick'ling ~ a thousand tears

Trick'ling ~ a thousand tears

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Swap Quatrains. A learning experiment.

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Trick'ling ~ a thousand tears


With head in clouds, a girl was she,

desiring her heart to be free;

thus, shying 'way from thoughts 'n crowds,

a girl was she, with head in clouds.


Alone, she travelled far and wide,

letting the stars her path decide;

blooming music soon unravelled,

far and wide, alone she travelled.


As nighttime fell, with wintry glow,

softly windward kiss she'd blow,

and hues so blurred would cast a spell

with wintry glow, as nighttime fell.


Oh, the moon shone then, up above,

sparkling crystals of buried love,

as songs lament her heart's intone;

then, up above, oh, the moon shone.


No longer found, the voices heard,

distance remained, without a word ...

her soul still ached, as time unwound,

the voices heard, no longer found.


Trick'ling her face, a thousand tears;

she wrapped her heart around her fears.

Mem'ries played back and interlaced ...

a thousand tears trick'ling her face.




© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Restarting my learning experiments with Richard. :)

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I love your experiments, your expressions, opening your poetic mind to so many wondrous variants. Here you voice such a tenderness, so a beautiful melancholy. One feels the magic of the lights in darkness all around and the suffering soul being released in every sacred tear. Enchanted.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I love working on new poetry forms to push myself out of my comfort zone :) while writing this piece.. read more
An owl on the moon

3 Months Ago

Ah, smiling so much... that is one of my favorite pieces too. I am very thankful you continue to pre.. read more



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So beautiful- sometimes alone is the most understood place we can be - the emptiness of the sky and stars speaks a million words - the loudest voices are heard in the silence of the night- the light faced then moon shines the way - we know we feel we trust- wonderful and unique🌹

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here and for appreciating this piece, my friend :)
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

3 Months Ago

How could one not appreciate- only a honour🌹
I really enjoyed this poem. I love the consistency and restraint you showed working within the form you chose. It's a classic form and subject done beautifully.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Aye, it was interesting challenging for me to work through this form since I usually don't write rhy.. read more
Yumna,
Spot-on syntax, rhyme, rhythm, and flow … one would be hard-pressed, indeed, to find a more eloquently stroked, deeply emotional, or beautifully rendered Swap Quatrain than this.
Your metaphor and imagery virtually dance upon the page, up into our minds, hearts, souls, and emotions in such a way the impact is deeply palpable to the senses, but these kind of moments seem to be the hallmark to many of your most excellent writings.
Picture selection, font choice, and gentle color set the perfect mood, and highlight your moments to come … what a lovely work of poetic art, Yumna!

Thank you most gratefully for sharing and for allowing me to offer a wee hint here and there … big hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

You humble me with your extravagant praise, Richard! I'm grateful to have you as my mentor for poetr.. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

Nothing extravagant in my words, Yumna,
I express recognition of only that which you've labor.. read more
I love your experiments, your expressions, opening your poetic mind to so many wondrous variants. Here you voice such a tenderness, so a beautiful melancholy. One feels the magic of the lights in darkness all around and the suffering soul being released in every sacred tear. Enchanted.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I love working on new poetry forms to push myself out of my comfort zone :) while writing this piece.. read more
An owl on the moon

3 Months Ago

Ah, smiling so much... that is one of my favorite pieces too. I am very thankful you continue to pre.. read more

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