Pearls (Shape Poem)

Pearls (Shape Poem)

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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A learning experiment. Edited slightly.

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PEARLS
 A 
dew
 drop 
 ithe 
morning 
and pearls 
 in her eyes, at 
the same time ,
glistened smooth as 
pearly white shadows 
emerged, over-shadowing 
everything. A faint half smile 
crossed the sun's ever - young 
face as an arc of magentshades 
enveloped her very essence;   the 
tears that followed, soon washed 
away every doubt that she had  
harboured in her stoned, 
marble heart



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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Another adventure
in a brand new form,
to spread your wings
much higher than norm.

Sheer eye-candy, so beautifully built and presented, dear poetess … this is the epitome of elegance in visual and emotional poetic bliss.
Deeply imaginative and heart touching, your poetic imagery and Concrete image compliment each the other with equal grace, and that picture … OMG, it's scrumptiously gorgeous to the mind's-eye, setting a perfect ambience for your moment.

What a pleasure it is, YumnaKay, to enjoy your every new effort … KUDOS! ⁓ Richard : )

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

:D and you, of all people, know that I'll be bugging you for a long time to teach me new poetic form.. read more
Vivian Gospel

3 Months Ago

I should try this form sometime.



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tears that followed, soon washed
away every doubt that she had
harboured in her stoned,
marble heart

love those lines...and very beautifully done Yumna...
it has a classic feel to it like the pearls...



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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one. Glad you like it. :)
I love shaped poems. The only one I've never liked is the Girls are Like Apples tree-shaped poem. And that was just because as awesome as it looks, it's meaning was a bit... itemized.

But this poem is just beautiful and the way you mixed the colors in looks amazing. Very immersive for us readers. Overall, good work. I admire this, really. I myself could not be so original when it comes to shape poems like this.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I love your review on this piece. This was a first attempt in writing a shape poem but I'm glad you .. read more
Nicely done Yumna. Shape of the tear, the flow of tear drops from a marble heart.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating, Vivian. :)
excellent! you have told a complete story, defined the character and drew me in with the shape and title ..instantly .. i had to read several times as the first time through I could not help but be distracted by that shape and the colors and the dew. its like your protagonist wakens to a spectacular sunrise but she sees it so differently ...anchored it seems to that marble heart ... even the marbling is a conundrum for her it is beautiful and so smooth....but cold and as hard a stone anchor can be.... bravo for working so hard at the shape ... and filling it with words trimmed with skill and purpose ... tho you did "cheat" here and there ... i forgive you as the shape and poem are fine indeed! bravo says i!
E.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I actually feel relieved that someone noticed my cheating here and reprimanded me for that! (in a go.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

i just read this one about pearls also..thought you might like it ... http://www.writerscafe.org/wri.. read more
Thia could be my chosen favourite of yours. The words you've laid in such a beautiful and unique way just trickle into a delicate harmony of phrases. Finding the words I need to describe how this post makes me feel: mesmerised, calm as calm, perhaps. What- and whichever, this is near perfect.


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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Knowing that this piece made you feel calm makes me happy. :)
I was more aiming for the shap.. read more
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emmajoy

3 Months Ago

It's as near a sigh of words a poem could be, Yumna.
Aw, this was so sweet and true for me of late. Bless you, Dr Yumnakay for sharing your beautiful poem.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Dawn. Blessings. x
Simply stunning. You have created wonderful poetic imagery here Dr Y. Well done.

Chris

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Christine! :-)
fantastic Yumna, You are a really amazing and very talented poetess, not only by taking any form and make it into a wonderful pleasurable read, but also with how You paint emotions, You do it perfectly.

beauty to the eyes, heart and mind, Thank You my dear!

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Your lovely words here made me smile. Thank you so much for the appreciation, dear Light. I'm humble.. read more
wow i like the pearl shape the words in the pearl shape and the message so clear

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for liking this one, sette. Truly appreciate your words here :))
Woww!😯.....this stunned me hair to toe!
Your efforts got wings Doctor....tis encouraging and inspiring to give this type o writing a try...
Spectacular! :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Glad to get the little poetess stunned hahah
Thanks so much for reading and appreciating thi.. read more
Tahsin.Z🍁

3 Months Ago

You're welcome!! :)

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