stray bullets

stray bullets

i keep tryin' to escape
i keep tryin' to look away
the lies hate and rape
the shook the weak the fake
i keep tryin to find the man with power and sense
i'm not talkin' nickel and dime
i'm talkin' common without offense
treat our children like labor
and our women like they owe us a favor
i keep tryin' to save my family
i keep tryin' to make the rent
i just wonder when will help be sent
when can we repent
who needs liquor
who needs drugs
who needs nicotine
who needs to be held
who needs to be loved
i do
we do
he do
she do

we don't need to be harassed we need to be helped
we don't need to be heard we need to be felt
i don't speak my mind for my health
i speak it so my son can say he loves himself
every time i turn around someone's dyin'
i just need to escape
and i keep tryin'
i just need to look away
and i keep tryin'
time is the only thing that my pride is buyin'
--Z.Silas Herrera

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

Your poetic voice and your own voice are just so wonderfully powerful and strong in this writing. I believe every word you say and also believe that you know exactly what you're writing about. So many try to write about things they don't know or haven't lived and it shows in their work. This is authentic. You have lived this poem and actually so have I which is why I can say what I'm saying here.

Brilliant done work here :)

[October]

Wow.
The rhythm is perfect.
Very well writen.

[Taja B.]

I really enjoyed this! This is a very good rap with nice rhythm and flow, and it has a positive message. I just wish the world was like that-instead the crazy stuff that's happening in this world lately.

Nice job. Thanks for sharing.:)

[Raef C. Boylan]

The style of this is pure hip hop...the sentiments expressed more eloquently than many signed 'artists' are capable of doing. Hey - and you managed not to swear, just noticed that.
Very positive message to put out there; focused more on the love to be gained than hate healed by blood-stains. What to do and what not to do...instead of who to blame for what's been done.

I'm impressed by this.
Good write.

[Zelligg]

These words whip past my ears so rapidly, so frequently, just like the day thoughts I escape into the night to avoid. I can hear it and the rhythm is relentless and the words make sense out of the senseless of everything but greed.

[Self-esteem]

I likes...thought it was something different pleasantly surprised!

[Celtic Cat]

Wow, this one is really great. I love it. The whole piece is great, my fav lines:

I keep tryin to find the man with power and sense
I�m not talkin� nickel and dime
I�m talkin� common without offense

we don�t need to be harassed we need to be helped
we don�t need to be heard we need to be felt
I don�t speak my mind for my health
I speak it so my son can say he loves himself


This was great!!! Keep 'em coming!