She's free

She's free

A Story by Rochelle
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This is one of the endings to my story that I'm currently stuck on, please give me some feedback on what you think I should do with the two characters in this and what you think about them.

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I looked and looked at her, and I knew, as clearly as I know that I will die, that I loved her more than anything I had ever seen or imagined on earth.

They say in the moments before you die you see your life for start to end but for me all I saw was her deep blue eyes shedding tears for me and in that moment I felt like a god. The warmth from her hand on my chest covered in blood. “Hold on Kyran” but I can’t anymore because no matter what happens I know that in the end she’s safe, she’s free from all the pain that I’ve cursed her. All the times she could have died and I didn’t even think to consider it. She’s free from it all and finally I’ll be banished to the depths of hell to repent on all my sins. I know I don’t deserve her forgiveness but I hope she can find it in her heart to give me what I don’t poses the courage to do………forgive. 


© 2016 Rochelle



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Dear Rochelle. You said a lot in the short story.
"I know I don’t deserve her forgiveness but I hope she can find it in her heart to give me what I don’t poses the courage to do………forgive. "
Forgiveness take great effort and we cannot go forward holding regret. Thank you Rochelle for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Rochelle

11 Months Ago

thank you coyote for reading my short story and your review
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Rochelle.
This is one of the endings to my story that I'm currently stuck on, please give me some feedback on what you think I should do with the two characters in this and what you think about them or their relationship.......please


Posted 1 Year Ago



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Rochelle
Rochelle

Brisbane, Australia



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Hi guys and girls, I don't know how to exactly describe myself as a writer or what I get out of telling complete strangers about my life but I like writing because it sets me free, all my worry's o.. more..

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