Can you feel the rain

Can you feel the rain

A Poem by Greg Agee
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Romantic prose of love thats lost

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The rain it just keeps falling
Can you feel the rain
All these tears that I'm crying
They keep coming back again

Can you feel the rain,
Like my teardrops it keeps falling
Is there a chance you"ll ever love me like before
Do you think I"ll ever see the sun again

Like rain these tears are falling
The rain then washes them away
Maybe someday they will fall on you
Do you think that you will think about me then

Can you feel the rain
Like my tears it just keeps falling
It only happens when.I cry for you
I only cry for you on two occasions

And their Night and Day
I would give my life
If it meant, I could be with you
I would go broke and promise all my riches
If it got you lying next to me again

I need to feel you, in my arms
Your body next to mine
Ifs the only thing to me that matters
Your all I've ever wanted or have needed
Without you all I have are just these tears

Can you feel the rain,
Like my teardrops it keeps falling
Is there a chance you"ll ever love me like before
Do you think I"ll ever see the sun again

The tears just wash away
But the wanting you, it stays
Never missed a touch, as much as yours
I'm left here in such pain

I can never fall in love again
I"ll always be in love with you

Is there anything,
That I can do
To hold you once again

I think that your the only thing
That can ever stop this rain
Until then it keeps pouring

Can you feel the rain,
Like my teardrops it keeps falling
Is there a chance you"ll ever love me like before
Do you think I"ll ever see the sun again

Can you feel rain, darkness coming over me





© 2016 Greg Agee



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I am always elated when I am able to form a picture in my mind through someone else's prose. I love that I can feel your mind race and your pulse quicken with every line....delving ever deeper into a pit of desperation, insanity and hope. I feel like you are watching the rain first through a window and then as your pleas and questions intensify you find yourself in the middle of a cold dark street crying out at the top of your lungs...body drenched from the elements, face stained with tears.
The beginning of your poem seems like a whisper to me...as if you are telepathically trying to send your true love a message, but she never responds. So at the end you are screaming, begging, pleading for her answer and hoping she is looking at the same night sky that has become your darkness.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, that's exactly it. Desperation in love lost. Thanks again



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I just love the meaning!
The wording was awesome!
Keep it up!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Feels like a pulse of pain in every line ...Awh(

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Great love lost leaves great pain endured as one of the loneliest of lifes moments. Some never recov.. read more
I am always elated when I am able to form a picture in my mind through someone else's prose. I love that I can feel your mind race and your pulse quicken with every line....delving ever deeper into a pit of desperation, insanity and hope. I feel like you are watching the rain first through a window and then as your pleas and questions intensify you find yourself in the middle of a cold dark street crying out at the top of your lungs...body drenched from the elements, face stained with tears.
The beginning of your poem seems like a whisper to me...as if you are telepathically trying to send your true love a message, but she never responds. So at the end you are screaming, begging, pleading for her answer and hoping she is looking at the same night sky that has become your darkness.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, that's exactly it. Desperation in love lost. Thanks again
I'm usually not that much into poetry, but your work really touches me. This poem has such a beautiful flow and the repetitions make me feel the rain and the tears. There's such tenderness and deep sadness. I'm honestly moved. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Im humbled. I respect your opinion more than you know. Thanks !
Pain, sadness and desperation.Three things that come out beautifully from the poem. Well written

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Thanks Paul always appreciate your input.Thank You
this is an amazing poem. Thank you for sharing I really enjoyed reading it. it flows really well and I can really feel the desire to be with the loved one again from your words. Keep up the good writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much. I appreciate your time.
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I cannot tell you how many times I have come back to read this poem. How much it hits home and strangely consoles my feelings as if someone else empathizes. I almost wish to thank you for sharing this

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Wow, thank you so much.
This is indeed a sad piece. I love how the verse is written such that you are lost and in despair. The words are simple, yet powerful. However, I personally believe there is a slight bridging problem in the last two lines of the second stanza. At first I felt the two lines were discontinued but when I read it for the second time, I connected them. They third line feels like something in front of it is missing. I guess that's my bad judgement too. However, the verse as a whole is simplistic and beautiful in a sad way with the pain it conveys.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Try it on now Sage, it's better, though I usually flow through with no edits. I.really like this one.. read more
Sage

1 Year Ago

It really is better now! There is a a minor spell error that you can disregard. The poem does not ce.. read more
Greg Agee

1 Year Ago

Where is spell error message, please sir. Thank You c for your time

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