False Impressions

I had a friend once, but not anymore, 

My heart was broken so I shut the door, 

The alcohol, The apologies, not an excuse! 

One friend on your list that you will lose. 

We had a past, a present, but not anymore, 

Some good, some bad, but what was it for? 

For it to be chucked back in my face, 

My time, my effort, it was all a waste.

I was always there for you, but not anymore, 

The friendship we did have, you went and tore, 

It could've been one of your worst mistakes, 

Because now I know the whole friendship was FAKE!

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

Interesting poem, I like it. The only thing I have to help this poem out is the lines, "For it to be chucked back in my face, Do you not now think, what a waste?" breaks up the flow of the poem a bit. Aside from that, the line "The friendship we did have, you did tore," Is strange since the did before tore throws it off. To keep the flow and remove the did, maybe you could say the friendship we did have, you went and tore. Welcome to writercafe and great poem!

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you, your advice was helpful. Glad you like it :)

[Riley Bray]

You're welcome! It was very good!

[RachelReaper]

I think all of us have felt like this at least once in our lives. I know I have.

[Prritiy]

The friendship we did have, you went and tore,

Because now I know the whole friendship was FAKE!

you have given words to the feelings i have also felt. liked the creation.

best wishes

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you very much for your review :), unfortunately, some 'friends' make us feel this way.

[Prritiy]

yes, sadly, there are some.

[minnie:)]

this is a good poem, very true to, happens to a LOT of people

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you :) that is true, just keep hold of the friends that act as real friends.

[Acucena G.]

FAKE friends are every where , its like a disease that the cure was not found yet, lol

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Very true. Those fake friends tend to become lonely, eventually.

[Acucena G.]

For sure , I guess ur fake friend is missing u ryt now

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Indeed. I have not spoken to her since January 2010, at first I felt sad, but I do not miss her and I am glad she has not been in my life! :)

[Acucena G.]

kkkkkkk

[Acucena G.]

ITS TOUCHING, I FEEL THE SAME ABOUT THE FRIENDS I ONCE HAD, KEEP IT UP

[Zoe Marie Ross]

Thank you, I am sure we are not the only people to have had friends like that in the past.

[Acucena G.]

You are welcome, you can visity my work as well as review them.