Well, I would say the scene with the homeless man holding out the cup was the part that would best get at the feeling you're trying to give–Hank almost coming to a realization that in the long term, what he has a bit trivial. But, I really didn't come away feeling either of those thoughts specifically. That he was disgusted by his trivial life or that he was disgusted that he enjoyed it. Instead, I felt Hank realized the emptiness and pointlessness of it all, not really disgust. I guess if you wanted to get across that he was disgusted that he enjoyed all of his important yet petty achievements, the homeless guy scene would definitely be the best place to expand and try to do it right now. Hope that helps in some way.
just so you know, that's not my boyfriend. He's been my ex since January. There is a delay on my featured pieces. ha. I wait till I feel like I've gotten enough feedback on them before I change them. I don't even like that piece very much. But thanks for the feedback =)
KH
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