Aspiring New Authors Forum Cafe Critique

I'm opening this thread for people to start posting their work for reviews. I may not always have the time to give out reviews as much as I'd like. But I will do my part give to participate. I am encourage other to join in as well. Either post your work, or give a review, your choice. =)

This is my work.
The title is Armageddon Rising.

So far this is really good! Once again you amaze with your writing style, and it only gets better and better. Definitely, going to continue reading. Thanks for submitting this to the forums. You should also post this to the "Writing" tab, so I can feature it on our group site!

Keep it up! Going to finish reading now =P

-Taliya