The Structured Poetry Group Forum feedback would be lovely :)

This one is actually not as structured as most of my poetry, but i really liked the outcome and thought it still flowed pretty well. i was just wondering what you all thought about it...i entered it in a contest but maybe prematurely because i could have edited it a bit more :) well, thanks, any input would be helpful.

By the way, share your poems with me if you ever want a review. i love reading everyone's poetry-- i could do it all night (which is unfortunate for the me of tomorrow who will be bleary eyed and underslept)