The Writers' Coffeehouse Forum My very first story

"The sun's warmth enveloped the village since early morning, its caring heat bringing a new life to most of the things within, ranging from the wide variety of blooming plants in beautiful, oriental gardens to the village's children, who innocently played and ran around in the brightness of the sun, careless about the darkness of the world underneath it. The loud, high pitched clinking of heavy metal echoed throughout the village. Oh so peaceful yet obviously announcing the dramatic arrival of another samurai." I am very much looking for reviews under my featured book "Silver Dragon - The book of freedom" I put alot of effort into it and I really don't want my work to slip over people's heads! Thank you all in advance.