The writing affectionate Forum Can you give me feedback on my..

I wrote my first short story about 2 weeks ago. So far it has just over 200 views but I have only recieved positive feedback. I refuse to believe my story is, in any way, perfect. If you can take a look at it and give me honest feedback, I would greatly appreciate it.   The link to my Short Story, entitled "Screaming Silence" is:   *Also, if you like the story, It would be great if you could share the link with some friends*