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Critique some writing for me?

8 Years Ago


G'day guys, would LOVE some constructive criticism of a little something I'm working on. It's 23 pages long, a few drafts in, I'm reasonably satisfied with it so far I'd love to get some feedback though - please leave some (detailed) feedback in the link below if you can set aside a few mins to read it! Cheers guys! 
Mwah! Fankyou!