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READ ME!!!16 Years AgoThis thread is designed for you to post links to your works that you wish to have reviewed by the group and also to help launch the piece gain recognition from the entire site. I ask that the poems you add have 3 or less reviews posted. Also, in the near future, I will add ten new pieces, per week, posted as a piece by me encouraging the Cafe to read and review your work. So keep this thread going, but note you can only post a piece ONCE. So here is your chance to get reviews that you deserve and that are long over due. ONLY Writer's Cafe Mentorship members can post in here and expect their work to be presented weekly to the Cafe.
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[no subject]16 Years AgoWhere do we go?
Where are we at? And.......where do we go? Am I right? Am I wrong? And.....how will I know? Complications and complexities, memories of her lying right next to me So close our souls connected and I could taste her breath on me It's a shame I didn't know then that she would be the death of me You think you know it all, it's a shame you never saw the best of me I understand why you left, you were disappointed with the rest of me But now I'm alone and just broken with no one to clean up this mess of me I never claimed to be perfect, but it seems that's what was expected of me I just wanted you to be honest and loyal and somewhat respectful of me But the scent of your skin and taste of your lips left me feeling rather exceptionally But I know I'll have to let go of you at some point eventually I just pray when its over that you'll always remember me And just exactly what it is that my babygirl meant to me My demons on the inside destroyed the angel Heaven sent to me I hope you never meant to hurt me, atleast not intentionally Do you force a fake smile and cringe at the mention of me? If you saw me would you smile and wave or pay no attention to me? Would you proceed to ignore? Or treat me like before? Would you run to me like the waves crash to the shore? Is it forever and always or is it simply no more? My emotions are wounded by her motions and movements A love that seemed strong is now slowly diminishing I told you I loved you it's a shame you weren't listening And he thinks to himself is she laying there missing him? Does she remember laying intertwined, laying there kissing him? Promises of a future that quickly turned into dust Dreams and hopes were destroyed by mistrust I'm scared that it's love cause I know it's not lust I put myself out there and now it's for what? Where are we at? And.......where do we go? Am I right? Am I wrong? And.....when will I know? .......................................................................... Too Many Problems Too little answer to too many problems Drown them in liqour and simply dissolve 'em Cause for 25 years I simply can't solve 'em So I put 'em on tracks and let the DJ revolve 'em With mid-level intelligence, no education from college What I lack in experience I make up in knowledge One day I'll be famous just like grandmama called it I'm starting to shine while still rather unpolished Everyday on these corners kids lives get demolished Heartache and hardship, no s**t get accomplished Enjoy everyday cause not another one's promised Morning and nighttime, all day always honest If you ain't down with truth than you better get on it Sit up and get up, I spit up the words It's gon be some s**t like you've never heard Magic with adjectives, the noun and the verbs Spit it so smooth to get the chick with the curves Just keep it real or you'll get on my nerves Show no respect and you'll get kicked to the curb Keep the truth on my chest while I swang and I swerve Cause I drink and I smoke whenever the urge Must face everyday with strength and with courage .......................................................................................... 4's and 2's Noun 4 noun and verb 4 verb Sound 4 sound and word 4 word Pound 4 pound the boy's absurd Sound 4 sound until I know it's heard Rhyme 4 rhyme and line 4 line My mind's design is to be divine Tooth 4 tooth and eye 4 eye Truth 4 truth and lie 4 lie Tear 4 tear and cry 4 cry Year 4 year and try 4 try Blood 4 blood til all us die From east 2 west and north 2 south From brain 2 tongue and mind 2 mouth From up 2 down and in 2 out From fake 2 real and trust 2 doubt From ups 2 downs and rise 2 fall From short to tall and great 2 small From door 2 door and wall 2 wall Come more and more, come one 2 all |
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[no subject]16 Years AgoHere is a link to a poem on which I would appreciate much criticism:
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[no subject]16 Years AgoPlease review the following poems
Silent Scream One Horrid Day Burden Thank you, Kim |
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Read me. Review me. Make me grow!16 Years AgoHi,
I'd like to get feedback on my short story "Ice Cream Man" I welcome constructive critcism and am not intimidated by candid commentary. Be sure to point out any weaknesses, such as transition/flow, writing style, POV, etc. Thank you! Leticia |
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[no subject]16 Years AgoGuess I didn't do that right....
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[no subject]16 Years AgoI would really appreciate reviews/criticism on the following pieces:
Liberty This Is America Punchline Thanks in advance! -Erin |
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[no subject]16 Years AgoI would really appreciate some reviews on this following poems:
The Unrequited Couple In The Sepia Toned World The Candy Coated Truth We Are Bitter Rivals, Whose Vibes Wouldn't Even Bend Glass |
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[no subject]16 Years AgoOk here are some
Stories Poems Kate |