Hell

I had posted this poem on another site... and had someone steal it and try to make it theres! damn people these days...

            If I could kill
                 Without being caught
                     I undoubtedly will
                         Kill the one that has brought
                               This annoying and hurtful sorrow
  To end their miserable life
        To never see them today, later, or tomorrow
              The pleasure it would bring
       When cutting them open and draining them
                                  As if they had never meant anything
                          Laughing hard until dry was every f*****g vein of them
                The happiness I would feel
       As they begged for life and realized
that the devil was real
      And he wasn’t a supernatural thing
           Something they were sure didn’t exist
                 But an actual human being
                        That had absolutely no soul to risk
                                 Someone that had no god no person to be judged by
    A person with no feelings, no respect, no moral aspect
                                 Somebody who expected no heaven so didn’t even bother to try
                         that’s the real threat, real danger, real devil
                 Because it was made by pain, by a scarred child
        Not a clueless wanna be rebel
    I wouldn’t care what family I was tearing apart
Pain can f**k with the purest of minds
       Even entirely darken a heart
               All things considered, I wouldn’t give a s**t
                    To personally put someone
       In the lowest of hells pits.

Author's Note

This poem is kinda old... But what do ya think??

Reviews

[light and ashes]

A intense poem that displays the emotions of a soul wrapped in pain and anger at the cause. Jumps into the depths of your soul without reason and without morals to the primative side that doesn't give a damn. Fantastic

[what-the-frick]

Dark and powerful .. I wouldn't want to cross you!!

[JCwilson]

Beautifully honest and powerful. In a very few paragraphs you have revealed our primal nature, unchecked, uncaring and unforgiving...the true essence of evil. I like this poem very much. I have known such devils and at that first moment of realization that you are in the presence of such evil you are pierced to the core with an icy chill that you wont soon forget. You have gone where many writers fear to tread and taken us with you into the heart of darkness. Thanks for sharing

[Canicus]

I like it. alot of anger in it

[sugar]

i enjoyed it, i found it very interesting

[Silent Knight]

I like it. Its very dark and has a fun format.

[Magic plus the mayhem.]

I love the format an the flow! Great write c:

[CharlesMonroe]

This is so dark, but still so good. I love it, it's amazing Sam (:

[Coyote Poetry]

I had a few of my poem show up elsewhere. My answer is always the same. If you want my poetry. Please re-write it better then I did. I like this poem. To kill and hell in the same poem. The battle to keep sanity is hard sometime. Desire to hurt someone can be hard to control. A excellent poem.
Coyote