On My Last Legs

A Poem About Sacrifice

On My Last Legs

I gave you everything

you took it

I breathe for you

you inhaled every breath

I held you in comfort

You felt safe

I hold a blade because of you

drip. .drip...drip

Her answers to a simple question 

tore the goodness out of my soul

why have you shamed our love?

"You cannot make me whole"
Dragging myself up
  swig another drink

walls closing in 

blood as black as ink

Leave then if I can't complete you

pursue that elusive ONE

every part that cared for you
 Is already done

grabbing used blade 

placing against her face

tears roll down her cheeks 

put her in her place

"please don't hurt me baby"
too late for her pleas

locking our eternal tomb

throwing away the keys

Slicing every piece of flesh

You take it

exhausted breathing heavily
you inhale your remaining breaths 
holding you the last few seconds
you feel only hate
I hold a blade because of you

drip. .drip...drip

Author's Note

Let's get back into the dark poetry
please let me know what you all think
I hope you are as excited about my return as I am

Please review and feel free just to comment or enjoy my poem

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

I do quite like the darkness in this, it's well placed and effective. however, with your "drip. .drip...drip"s: i don't understand the period before the second drip, and if you're to use it more than once, it almost has to be more than twice for a poem of this length. incorporate more of them?

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

My favorite line..."Leave then if I can't complete you, pursue that elusive ONE" Very clearly written pain! Kudos for the darkness. :)

[Katie]

Your imagery in this is beautiful. Creepy, rather unsettling but very well done. Excellent work!

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

even better than before

[Bryan Micheni]

brilliant. simply put:-)

[Jed]

dark and amazing love your style

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Very well written. I enjoyed your dark poems, and I adore the way you write. Good work as always

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

It was very dark, very interesting, very captivating. As always as before: A job well done!!

[Forgotten]

Definitly a dark poem, but i love it. so powerful and descriptive, it really paints a picture for me. Thank you amazing wirte!!

[trainwreck]

I love seeing you back! I love the idea of you being here again! This was fabulous as far as dark poetry goes.