Rhyme Crime

Rhyme Crime

A Poem by Zoë

A free verse is a rhyme crime

It loves to mess me up

On poetry tests my answers

Are wrong

When it comes to verse and text

Its meter or pattern

Don’t even exist

But it can have rhyme

Or can’t

Depending on its content

But I can rhyme

As this poem has shown

Oh wait…

Never mind

I’m just going home

© 2016 Zoë


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Well you have clearly expressed your hate(?) for poetry. But you have done it with humor which I guess is the major plus point of this poem. I have been meaning to come to your page for a while, but since I am busy reading so many works, kinda hard not to get here quickly. Now I had trouble reading the it the first time around because of the way you have broken verses. Now the only thing I ensure my poetry follows is a flow. That's all i care. Whether free verse or rhymes or acrostics( I do varied styles ) So for me here there is only a break in the flow at the line: Don't even exist. kinda hard to catch the flow. Other than that you have maintained structure, there's actually some real good humor and sarcasm. This one was never really about invoking imagery but it makes one think, so it does a job as a poem.

Still points to improve on: When you are writing a short piece of poetry, try to create a little more impact, free verse or not. Hate it or love it. When you are expressing something ensure that the flow is never disrupted. It helps. You are stating stuff, how about use examples to show this very rhyme crime. Take the poem you hate most and express the love you have for it (Sarcasm rocks!!) Now that's my suggestion. ^^

Now although my profile might say I am a poet because of so many poems posted, but I'd say I am an accidental poet. I just started out poetry( just last month in fact) to fine tune my skills and command over the English Language since it is not my native tongue. And it turns out it has helped me a lot more than I could ever imagine. I am a fan of writing prose since I do not get time to write them nowadays (Actually writing a novel series, not posted any of it here though) . But this has ended up being quite useful. Although I was not a fan of poetry it's helped me a lot now in writing. I know this because I see you have written books. And I like to read and write stories more than anything else. I will be giving your book a read as well ^^ May take time but I will share my views there as well.( I think i will do a better job there than here) Thought of sharing this as well.

I enjoyed the read thank you for sharing ^^

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

8 Years Ago

Haha will read all of those works you have mentioned here actually. Jcat's writing is something I en.. read more
Zoë

8 Years Ago

Ill try to read and review it if I have time tomorrow. But I'll be at school for most of the day and.. read more
Érenn

8 Years Ago

Oh sorry forgot to mention that I already read One Punch Man, the original drawn manga by ONE so yes.. read more



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This is very good Zoe. Please write more.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Ha ha ha, I like that ending. There's probably not much that I can say after that first review, but I will say you're doing a pretty bang-up job. As long as poetry is real to you, it's not wrong.

Every piece has to have purpose, struggle, plight, revelation, yada yada, whatever; otherwise it's dry and boring. Those characteristics of a piece come in all shapes, sizes, colours, methods, etcetera etcetera.
You have them. So good job. Always room for improvement, but even "near perfection" still is not perfect.

Good work. Good piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zoë

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the compliments :)
Well you have clearly expressed your hate(?) for poetry. But you have done it with humor which I guess is the major plus point of this poem. I have been meaning to come to your page for a while, but since I am busy reading so many works, kinda hard not to get here quickly. Now I had trouble reading the it the first time around because of the way you have broken verses. Now the only thing I ensure my poetry follows is a flow. That's all i care. Whether free verse or rhymes or acrostics( I do varied styles ) So for me here there is only a break in the flow at the line: Don't even exist. kinda hard to catch the flow. Other than that you have maintained structure, there's actually some real good humor and sarcasm. This one was never really about invoking imagery but it makes one think, so it does a job as a poem.

Still points to improve on: When you are writing a short piece of poetry, try to create a little more impact, free verse or not. Hate it or love it. When you are expressing something ensure that the flow is never disrupted. It helps. You are stating stuff, how about use examples to show this very rhyme crime. Take the poem you hate most and express the love you have for it (Sarcasm rocks!!) Now that's my suggestion. ^^

Now although my profile might say I am a poet because of so many poems posted, but I'd say I am an accidental poet. I just started out poetry( just last month in fact) to fine tune my skills and command over the English Language since it is not my native tongue. And it turns out it has helped me a lot more than I could ever imagine. I am a fan of writing prose since I do not get time to write them nowadays (Actually writing a novel series, not posted any of it here though) . But this has ended up being quite useful. Although I was not a fan of poetry it's helped me a lot now in writing. I know this because I see you have written books. And I like to read and write stories more than anything else. I will be giving your book a read as well ^^ May take time but I will share my views there as well.( I think i will do a better job there than here) Thought of sharing this as well.

I enjoyed the read thank you for sharing ^^

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

8 Years Ago

Haha will read all of those works you have mentioned here actually. Jcat's writing is something I en.. read more
Zoë

8 Years Ago

Ill try to read and review it if I have time tomorrow. But I'll be at school for most of the day and.. read more
Érenn

8 Years Ago

Oh sorry forgot to mention that I already read One Punch Man, the original drawn manga by ONE so yes.. read more

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