Preface

This was recently added to the already finished novel, as I had never gave a proper description of the world in which the story takes place. This is really needed for the set up of the possible series

Rakuminan is one of 37 countries left in the territory of Firisha. It was stated several decades ago that the large land would be split between the 50 most worthy families of the time. Then these families would slowly merge into one. It was a way to avoid violence and wars, as the only way to merge the lands was by winning of the heart of the ruler of a land next to you, which limited your chances and thus of course even after various decades only a handful of lands had ever expanded.

Many of these expansions were not made on the value of love, but mostly due to the two uniting in an agreement for more power and wealth. Each land is ruled very different and thus there is a lot of tension. Rakuminan is one of the more prosperous countries. It's citizens were free to choose their jobs, gain their wealth and spend their money however they wished. They were protected from evil by the kingdoms hand picked cops, but things have drastically began to change.

After the creation of the clan known as X the citizens live in fear. The clan not only would kill for fun or to steal, but they also would break into the most highly guarded prisons just to free those who were held captive there. The worst came when the clan made the royal family it's target and killed several of the close family. Then eventually the king himself was assassinated leaving the queen to take care of the ruling alone.

Author's Note

I am not that great at doing prefaces, nor explaining what may be valuable to the over all plot. If you find anything confusing or would like me to add more detail into the life styles please explain, thank you.

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

If this is very important for the set up of the world that the subsequent story takes place in, then you may want to flesh this preface out even more. All that I see now is pretty basic background information, so I assume that you have more which you haven't added yet here. Do your characters have some weird powers? Do they live in a world with different laws of physics from our own? Do they have pre-existing relationships with other characters? These are all things that could be adumbrated here in your preface.

Alternatively, if you haven't got much else information you need to tell readers before the story actually begins, then maybe this preface isn't necessary at all. As I stated before, the information here now is quite basic, so you could just sprinkle it throughout your story and reveal the background info indirectly.

If that's too much editing for you or you want to stick with the preface thing, that could work too, but I'd suggest giving it a little bit more of a voice. In other words, who is narrating this preface for the reader? It could be some elder resident of one of these kingdoms, a historian within the world, or maybe just an unknown manuscript laying around - there are all sorts of ways to weave it into the story some more. What you have written now is ok, but it ends rather too abruptly I think, and you should choose a different, less informal word than 'cops' in the second paragraph.

[Ashley.M.E]

I understand what you are trying to say, all the questions you have asked do get answered through the story, the only section that I know I did not touch on is the bit that I added here. I could easily re-write this and make it from one of the main character's or even a character that may or may not come in, in another novel.

I believe you are write about not using the word cops, I stuck with that word because it is what I referred to them as when I began writing the story at around 13 years old. However I do believe officer, or guard would be better fitting to explain than the word "cop".

[MoriartyMesa]

I liked how this felt more like a dairy than a tale, the truth in the words would serve for someone seeing everything first hand and I felt it was that more true.


Please send me more.

[Ashley.M.E]

That was actually what I was going for. I added this later on, as I didn't really explain much through the first novel, but I had thoughts of making this into a book series, and this section fits perfectly to explain a lot of things that aren't really explained in the first book, but will be more explained in the second. Also it is meant to be more of a passage for a diary, so the first person view was very intentional.

Also the first chapter is already up and the whole novel is written just need to edit the next chapter.

[A. Amos]

Great preface and seem like you have one interesting tale to share, all the best my friend

[chaotic katie]

nicely written! I enjoyed reading it.