Drip drip

Drip drip

A Chapter by Ashley.M.E

I’m tired of this

Drip drip

It’s all I hear

Drip drip

The sound of my tears

Drip drip

Shows me that I’m alone

Drip drip

I can’t get a grip

                                     Drip drip

                                    It’s just getting louder

                                    Drip drip

                                   Echoing through the brain

                                     Drip drip

                                I can hardly stand

                                    Drip drip

                                 Why did you leave

                                    Drip drip

                                   Why did you go

                                   Drip drip

                                 I feel all alone

                                 Drip drip

                               Now I know

                               Drip drip

                              I am alone

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Posted 10 Years Ago


A very effective use of onomatopoeia with tears dripping all over the poem... And the short lines bring out the emotions conveyed in this poem vividly...It is very much like the halted words that a person speaks when he or she is crying....the repetition "why did you leave" and "why did you go" and also "I am alone" also speaks of the sinking feeling in the author's heart...well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


this poem was filled with lots of sad emotions and wonderful imagry and reminds me of a song i heard once before called drip drop anyways this was a really great peice great job keep writing because you are really good at it

Posted 13 Years Ago


the repetition of words can be annoying but you pull it off well! nice work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow. this piece is amazing. definitely one of my favorite. at first i thought the repetition would be annoying, but i found that i really loved it and it made this poem speaks levels more. this is just...amazing. i can't think of anything else to say. amazing job. great flow, message, it was clear, just....amazing

Posted 13 Years Ago


very creative...i like it
Great Job

Posted 13 Years Ago



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