Rain

Rain

A Poem by 12.09am
"

Comparing him to the weather

"

Rain 


It started off soft

Peaceful and Quiet

But it got heavy

Loud like a Riot

 

Soft whispers,

Light Hugs

 

Sharp Shivers,

Harmful Drugs,

 

You were like the rain,

I knew it was coming,

I saw the storm clouds,

But never thought of running.

 

I thought it was just a sprinkle,

But it never passed,

It only got heavier,

And that’s when I asked

 

Do you still love me?

 

And The words I heard ,

Cracked like thunder

Echoing in my head

Making me wonder

 

Why didn’t I run

when I had the chance

I thought it was fun,

it was just a trance


i miss the lilac sky,

that once was

but that died 

long ago

© 2016 12.09am


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Personally I love rain, something about it walking in it makes nothing else matter, in that moment everything is okay. As humans we crave thrills and don't think about risks, sometimes the idea of being completely happy, even for a moment, is supposedly worth it. I thoroughly enjoyed this!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

12.09am

7 Years Ago

Thankyou so much !
12.09am

7 Years Ago

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it.. read more
Heather

7 Years Ago

I'll get right on that :)


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Very interesting..I had to read it twice...an analogy to so very many situations in life..
Cudos to You...
A poem for you..
IT..Rained..on my page, the deep blue ink ran together...the words..of my poem ..
No longer..readable..
But I knew..
What they said...
Because it was penned from the heart..
Beautifully, thoughtfully writen..
Debbie

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful Poem. Love the concept, wish i could write as good as you. If you don't mind would love feedback on a poem I just wrote "Questions".

Posted 7 Years Ago


I enjoyed this poem.
"i miss the lilac sky,
that once was
but that died
long ago"
The above lines were my favorite. I felt the longing and the memory. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Me, personally, I've always enjoyed the rain but I understand what it is typically associated with in literature (sadness, despair, loneliness,etc.). I really loved your poem! It actually inspired me to write a poe if my about rain! Loved your poem so much! You are an incredible writer!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful poem! You are a brilliant writer. I absolutely love this poem. The buildup was perfect. You have a way with words ;) "I miss the lilac sky," is probably my favorite line - so beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


12.09am

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words ! means alot :)
A wonderful comparative analysis of what goes on in our heads and hearts as we are drawn to the storm.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love this, the continuity of events building up, mixed with the emotions that we all feel in our relationships.

Posted 7 Years Ago


12.09am

7 Years Ago

Really tired to portray the metaphor of nature and events in our relationships, glad you enjoyed it .. read more
Hi
This is your first poem I have read and I thoroughly enjoyed your visuals, use of language and your passion and came to the conclusion that you are a very talented poet. :)

Blessings

El

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

12.09am

7 Years Ago

Thankyou so much! really glad you enjoyed it :)
12.09am

7 Years Ago

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it.. read more
I love the double meaning of rain.
It is both sad and gloomy and a perfect backdrop for pain.
But it is also cleansing, washing away that pain.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Papaya

7 Years Ago

I will try to read it but it's midnight here so possibly tomorrow. :)
12.09am

7 Years Ago

No worries ! haha it's only 2pm here
Papaya

7 Years Ago

Australia or New Zealand then I guess. :)
Personally I love rain, something about it walking in it makes nothing else matter, in that moment everything is okay. As humans we crave thrills and don't think about risks, sometimes the idea of being completely happy, even for a moment, is supposedly worth it. I thoroughly enjoyed this!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

12.09am

7 Years Ago

Thankyou so much !
12.09am

7 Years Ago

If you had some time to check out my short story " the call " , I'd really love some feedback on it.. read more
Heather

7 Years Ago

I'll get right on that :)

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