The Love they Need

He sits on his roof every night.
Feeling unloved and unwanted.
Felling that he is  a burden to many, and hated by all.
He has no one to love, and no one to love him.
No one to be there for him when all his walls crumble and fall.

She stares at her reflection in the blade every night.
Brought back to the daily battle she faces with herself
Being called names , and being pushed around.
Being rejected and always let down.
Her tears are meaningless to her now
one cut should make it better somehow.

Then the night comes where he has had enough
he lets it all go he can no longer be tough
He yells and screams and brakes everything he sees
He packs his bags and is ready to leave
To go to a place where he finds the love he needs

The dreadful night comes when the pain cuts to deep
and red will be the only thing she sees
She feels happy to be free
to be away from all the pain and misery

He ran away
So did she
for not being accepted like they wanted to be



 

Author's Note

This is my first time really witting a poem like this so please let me know what i can improve on. :D thank you.

Reviews

[Eliza Mae]

This is a great poem, Sierra. Pain is an eager theme for poetry. All too often pain overrides our emotions and becomes an irrational torture inside of us all. I love how you focused on, not only one, but two subjects in this poem.

There are a few grammatical errors.

"The Dreadful night comes when the pain cuts to deep" - in this line "Dreadful" doesn't need to be capitalized; however, if you did this on purpose and prefer it to be capitalized, then that is your choice as a writer. :) Also, in this line "to" should be "too".

In the last stanza, it says "he ran a away" when I think you meant to say "he ran away".

Anyway, those are just a few corrections. All in all, this is a wonderful poem. Thank you so much for sharing!! And BRAVO! :)

[Sierra D3]

Thank you so much 😊