Reflection

Who is that in the mirror?

REFLECTION

Crow's curls cascading to hide the monster

And exhibit expired beauty

Eyes of coal watching all

Turning endlessly and still unburnt

The corners of her trembling lips turn

In the direction where the shadows will illuminate the sun

Time and patience are her enemies when she starts run

As her legs of majesty are reduced to instruments of movement

Wishes of an unbreakable silver armor to disappear the

Soreness of her decapitated temple writhes in her mind

Her face is torn into bits and pieces of parchment,

With her watery signature to equilibrate her convex alignment

Her fingers scratch the facade of hypocrisy

The mask of happiness lies in ashes to the bag of secrets

Numbers mismatch her from the standards of the world

As she stands among a deplorable army of black doves

Never ending weight kills her under a back full of disgrace

A heart that will forever hold together the most beautiful

Doll the clowns will ever know

In the glass of growing pain, her most precious possession

Is nothing more than a silent torture

As she cries to me, to her reflection

Author's Note

If you read this, please leave a review. Good or bad, doesn't matter to me. Just let me know what you think.
Thank you to Sylvia Plath for the inspiration.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Sylvia Plath has always been a favorite poet of mine. I think you have captured her use of mystery, darkness, the macabre and tragedy in this piece. And what a tragedy we have here.. a young, obviously beautiful woman, yet a darkling, cannot see any sense of beauty in her reflection. Your use of language in this piece reveals what she does see instead.. your metaphoric language is brilliantly done. I am very pleased with this piece and enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for the journey.

[Euro]

I am very happy that you enjoyed my poem, Lori! I'm glad that you saw what I was talking about. It's sad that this happens to many girls, though. So many beautiful woman who degrade their beauty.
Thanks for reading and liking!

[Ravyne Hawke]

It really is sad, Penelope, but what I find encouraging is poets like you who give voices to these girls who see themselves as less than what they truly are. You are a heroine in my book -smiles-

[Euro]

Aww, thanks for that nice comment. I'm glad that you say that. Actually, I used to be like the girl I talk about in the poem and well, right now I don't feel so bad about myself but scars of how I used to think before are still there.
Nevertheless, I am someone that cares much of self-esteem and I don't like it when truly beautiful girls, if only physically, see themselves as ugly.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I think there is beauty in everyone.. physically, emotionally, spiritually... and when one's self-esteem is low, it is hard to let that beauty shine through. It is wonderful that you've made it somewhat of a mission to help others with their self-esteem, even if it is through your poetry. If more cared, this epidemic would diminish.

[Euro]

Oh, yes...that's true. I do believe that girls can be told that they are beautiful no matter what but you the media will always make sure to corrupt that beauty with the prototype of women they exhibit. I really hate them doing that.

[bryandc15]

Nicely done:)

[Euro]

Thank you!

[Katrina Saaresto]

I'm glad to know you're writing again, wo hoo! I missed your nice poetry already.
Ok, to the review now...
Well, I must say that I feel very sad for this girl! I could clearly visualize the pain she sees in herself as you describe her as someone good feeling like a monster. I could point out the parts where I see that but that would be too much.
"Crow's curls" I really like that description for the girl's hair.
Also, this poem is way too different from what I have read from you before, Penelope! I mean, it changed in a way that I can't quite put my finger on but it's in a good way, of course. Your choice for words were different from what you have ever written and the topic itself is something I haven't read coming from you. I'm not saying that's bad but I'm surprised you could pull off such a great poem this way.
I love the way you ended the poem, though! I mean, it's clear to the reader that this girl is not going to change just like many girls around us live. I like that.
Overall, a great poem! Love it! :D
-KS

[Euro]

Thanks for your review, Katrina. I am glad that you got the message in the end of the poem. It is true that so many girls in the world don't live comfortable with themselves although they truly are beautiful. Thanks for your nice words and your review. I am glad that you enjoyed reading this poem.
As to what you said about this poem being different than the ones of before, let me tell you that I felt those other poems were trash. I mean, I didn't feel anything as I read them and I felt this one in my heart because part of my inspiration for the poem was myself and how I have my image. I think I filled this poem with some emotion and not pretty words like my old poetry.
-Penelope H.

[Katrina Saaresto]

It's my pleasure to read your poem, Penelope.
And don't worry, I will enjoy your poems whether they are good or bad. To me, you'll be one of the best poets I have known of :)

[Euro]

Awww :)