Regular Teenage Life

Regular Teenage Life

A Story by 73v1n the unbelieveable
"

My life

"

My life like other kids is pretty cool but has it's up and downs but i like my life. I have two sisters one  name is lillyan she is five years old the other name is jillyan she is two.They sometimes annoy me but i love them anyway they are funny and make me laugh. I also like hanging out with my cousins like Donovan hes cool but still gets on my nerves sometime. But me and him love videogames we both are very good at playing videogames. I also like hanging out with josh he is a football player he also plays baseball they both are very fun to have around. I go to my dad's house every two weeks actually two weeks ago we went to Sea Side Heights in New Jeresy. My dad like playing videogames to with me and my sisters he really is a cool dad to have . I know it might seem like i have a good life well it is but it still has its disadvantages but it's good for me. 

© 2009 73v1n the unbelieveable


Author's Note

73v1n the unbelieveable
if you read please leave a review and if you can add me.

My Review

Would you like to review this Story?
Login | Register




Featured Review

not bad. but definitely needs some work.

it seems very amateurish because the sentences aren't structured properly and there are some spelling/grammatical errors.
the sentences also didn't seem to be in order. you went from one topic in the beginning, to something else, and back again to that same topic. it would have been okay if there was a point... but it just sounds like scattered thoughts.

overall, its really not so bad. a free-write can actually bring about great writing. so hopefully this is the start of amazing pieces.

good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

now thats cool u should write this as a diary.and u shouldn't jump from topic to topic and then back to the first topic.

Posted 11 Years Ago


not bad. but definitely needs some work.

it seems very amateurish because the sentences aren't structured properly and there are some spelling/grammatical errors.
the sentences also didn't seem to be in order. you went from one topic in the beginning, to something else, and back again to that same topic. it would have been okay if there was a point... but it just sounds like scattered thoughts.

overall, its really not so bad. a free-write can actually bring about great writing. so hopefully this is the start of amazing pieces.

good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

127 Views
2 Reviews
Rating
Added on September 2, 2009

Author

73v1n the unbelieveable
73v1n the unbelieveable

Orefield, PA



About
I Like r&b hip hop video games music more..

Writing