TRYING TO ERASE YOU

TRYING TO ERASE YOU

A Poem by AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA
"

TRYING TO BUILD IT AGAIN,MY HEART

"


Left with her pieces

In me

I reconstructed the building

The entablature of my heart

Managed to pump it

Recoiling its lost energy back to it

And

Learnt something that verry day

That

Lending some space in the courtyard of Ur heart is gud

But never make someone permanent there

Because

when they  leave

Their absence  kills ....�"

 

© 2015 AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA


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AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA
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An eraser that can erase these stains of heart by the one who left us betraying....invention of that can be highest seller!
But still for now it remains depending on time...
Emotional kar ditta!😊

Posted 5 Years Ago


Pretty good. I'm not sure that the misspellings are working for you, though. I'm not sure why you singled out "very", "your", and "good"for that treatment. You've definitely tapped into a universal feeling, and expressed it well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA

8 Years Ago

THANKS MAN. I HAVE TRIED TO PULL SOME STRESS ON THE SPECIAL WORDS, IN A HOPE TO GIVE SOME MORE WEIGH.. read more

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Added on August 13, 2015
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Tags: #LOVE, #LIFE, #PHASE, #HATRED, #REMOVING, #ERASING, #HER

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AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA
AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA

patiala, punjab, India



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just a bowl of imagination, where in my thoughts travel through the world of art may it be writings , poetry or sketches. seeker, learner, canon of love , gravity guy. more..

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