Silence

ringing in one's ear

small white noise never ending

driving me crazy

Kasey Miriam 2015

Reviews

[Stephen]

I always loved reading "Haiku's" but unfortunately, I don't know how to write..but it's a pleasure to me to have a write in you who writes such kinda beautiful Haiku's. Your feelings are get expressed throughout the words. I can feel the warmth of your heart, the feelings, the love, the beauty of the life through your words.

Keep writing!

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you so very much!

[Zahra]

interesting poem, you're good at describing a lot in short poems. Very nice

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much

[Sami Khalil]

ringing in one's ear

small white noise never ending

driving me crazy

[Eric Pudalov]

I like this one! Although I tend to agree with Nusquam below - I think "ringing in" might sound better than "ringing of," and also perhaps another word instead of "going," such as "ending" or "fading."

Haiku (and senryu, which I believe this is) are difficult to write really well (as you may know). I think it just takes awhile of tweaking them to get them perfect. Oh, and as I understand it, the main difference between haiku and senryu is subject matter. I believe most haiku are based around nature, and senryu deal more with things like relationships and emotions.

All that said, this is still good, and you've encouraged me to read more of your work!

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you for stopping by..... my other work is better I think at least

[Eric Pudalov]

Oh, no worries. We all have some work that's better than others.

[Sami Khalil]

Short but meaningful. A splendid poem...:)..................

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)............................

[captain]

In silence my mind is at play or the mind is in full dual thinking. True that silence makes one crazy but in other ways it finds answers. short and concise piece. nice!

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you for reading

[Nusquam Esse]

I like the concept of this, sometimes silence is maddening and more powerful than any words. My only suggestions is perhaps using "in" instead of "of", "ceasing" instead of "going", and "driving" instead of "making". But these are not strictly needed changes, they just feel more natural to me; which might not be the direction you would want to take anyway. I just figured I would throw it out there.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you for the constructive advice. Thats exactly what I neded a few ideas to bounce in my head so I can improve. Thank you

[M.K. Jawdat]

Very nice liked this short piece

[Kasey Miriam]

thank you for reading im glad you liked it

[wordman]

well I can relate to this one lol

[Kasey Miriam]

thanks for reading